|Reviews for The Hidden Truth's|
| vic 3/5/10 . chapter 6
i hope you are going to finish this story soon have enjoyed it
| A for Antechinus 10/14/09 . chapter 6
oh cliff hanger, the story is going well, although check the grammer, as the story is going well, but the sentence's don't seem to flow properly. Sorry I am trying not to flame, it's just it might make it better. Cheers A
| A for Antechinus 6/3/08 . chapter 5
hey, this is quite an interesting story, I like it that tess and jack are together now. thanks for the chapters so far, and please update soon. cheers
| Lozza-bear 5/4/08 . chapter 5
Mwahahaha, I was right! lol
Great chappie :D
Hope you can update soon so we find out whether I was fully right ;)
| Lozza-bear 4/24/08 . chapter 4
I have a feeling where you're going with this one...and I can't wait to see whether I'm right :D
| jakc 3/23/08 . chapter 3
It's isn't my sort of thing but for your first bit of writing it definitely isn't bad. In fact it has everything in it that I would want my writing to be. Concise, to the point, blatant and plain. You have the entire skeleton of a story that you want, solid characters, a time setting and obviously overlapping story lines and a heap of dialogue. You might just need to develop this a little more. Perhaps a little description because there's this great amount of dialogue (great if you're a verbal person, really) but no real sort of concrete descriptions about the objects in the story. I don't know if that makes sense. But, for example the point where you talk about the missing cattle on the Hinkson property, you didn't mention beforehand that there was cattle on the property, or even that the property was connected with cattle in someway (that might have been an element of surprise ;) ) so when the cattle is mentioned it's hard to imagine that there would have been any in the first place. I think you leave to much for the reader to assume. Which is an honest mistake.
Apart from that, everything's fine. It works as a story and well, keep writing!
| Lozza-bear 3/10/08 . chapter 2
That's looking good so far Kristoneon.
I'm not too familiar with BH as it's been years and years since I've watched it, so I can't comment on the characterisation, but it seemed pretty good to me :D
Hope you can update soon! :D