Its great! I was disappointed with SM's ending too. Anyways, I prefered SM's plot, but your ending.

This is a satisfying alternate ending to the original saga.

I don't generally appreciate viewpoint switches, and that's no less true for this story, but I suppose it had to be done.

Iread your story it was very good, but I don't like Bella and Jakes relationship, Bella and Edward are solemates so how can she have those feelings for Jake, don;t get me wrong, I like Jake alot, I just think that It shoun't be so hard for them.

I, too, was disappointed beyond words with the real version of breaking dawn. I read your version for the first time almost a year ago (before the book was published) and I have been looking for it again since I got a fanfiction account a few months ago. I love your version so much better than SM's. Honestly, I do. Your version of the wedding is exactly the wedding that I would have pictured Alice to put together. I swear it made me cry. I am so incredibly impressed with this story. When I think of Breaking dawn, this is the version that I want to remember, not that crap they published. Your story line was genius and you really stuck with the personalities and ways of the characters (ironically this is where SM failed the most). I cant even begin to describe how excellent I think this version is. Congratulations.

This so much better than the real book. The real book was corny

Ok, first I like ur writing technique, u appear to b a sensitive person to be able to describe these kind of emotions so well, but... what't ruining this for me is that you can't stick to the little details which I admit are little but when changed, they make a big difference, first, Charlie isn't bald, he doesn't own a dishwasher in his house and the most important thing, you mixed up the whole Edward/Bella self control, Edward is the one whose always controlled and stops himself at the right time, not Bella. Other than that I like your fan-fic but truly I love the original BD and it couldn't have come out better.

Wow,I really enjoyed your story. Great writing and story telling.

I have to say, I definitely enjoyed your version of Breaking Dawn better. I also wasn't entirely thrilled with Stephanie Meyer's version. It felt incredibly rushed towards the end for me, and a little unbelievable. I know, funny right, considering it's a book about vampires and werewolves. I think she might has well have added leprochauns and unicorns to it with how she was going with the story. The series seriously went downhill for me at Breaking Dawn. Anyhow, I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed your story and I was sad to see it end. I do hope that you write a fifth book one of these days though, if you already haven't. Maybe you can turn the series around in your own way and put a good ending to the series for us readers here ;)

wow!!
that was great!

NO!!
:[ Jacob is meant for Bella.
I hate Jamie. >.<

good story though, lol.

happy thanksgiving!

-TheChampagneSupernova

I loved your version of BD and honestly I thought the "real" one was dissapointing too. Just a suggestion, one that I would love to see happen, write a fifth book based on your version of BD. I was also wondering if you ever wrote that one about Jacob and Jamie? Well, thanks for writing such amazing things!

hi laura

i have been reading your story and this is the first time i am reviewing what you said about the last book in sm's series is true it was unexpected but remember this story you wrote is what you thought might happen in breaking dawn and it is how you thought it is going to happen none the less but don't just stop your story because her story is so much different from yours that is what makes it so unique and fun to read so consider doing the sequel you might find that even though you don't want to admit it but your story is as good as any other compared. don't let the simple fact of change keep you from writting your view on the story.

kind regards
ghost writer

I thought your story was amazing!! This was how the book should have gone. That whole Renesmee thing just threw me off... and I admit I was disappointed at the end of the book. Thank you for giving Jacob the hope that the book didn't.

I really liked the story u made. It was so much better that the original I have no idea how anyone could even like that book it was too predictable in my opinion and there was so many better ways that it could have been written. I'm not really good at writing in fact i actually suck but i will say this that ur version of breaking dawn met my expectation eventhough i have had many different thoughts about this story urs is a really good one.

hey
no i totally agree with you
Stephanie Meyer can just be glad that the other books in the series were that good that she couldn't wreck them with this book. I was so dissapointed though...my first thought was i've read fan fictions better than that!