Very imaginative. I really liked the story, nothing to forgive. Far more surprising for me than "Deadly enemies". Poignant and moving.

Was so sad-made me want to cry...but very good.

Oh my god, that was so sad! I actually want to cry right now, but I can't, so I'm stuck with that annoying feeling and choking. That was really beautiful, I can't believe! And it was so sad! I've never read a story like this, and... and, it was just so sad! It goes into my FAVs, by the way. A story that can make me feel like that is worth that and more.

You have nothing to worry about :) It was done very nicely. Great job!

aw. so sad. but well writen.

I'm a young writer and have a lot of trouble writing very intense or sad you have any tips for writing them? PM me when you can. thank you!

-Kimmy

this is a cute little one-shot, i teared up at the end, i love it.

This seemed like a fitting place for me to start, since I just complained that the Bella/Charlie relationship was hard for me to understand. Of course, it’s not the Bella I know. It’s Charlie’s Bella, and she sounds absolutely wonderful, the way a father would think about his only child. It’s the ones left behind that your heartbreaks for, even young desperate to please, to make it better, to make it right, Stephenie. Both of them stuck picking up the pieces, in their own different ways.

You had some great details about Charlie in here, from not fighting over where Bella spends her time to the difficulty having conversations with strangers. I couldn’t help but be moved by his loss. I was glad to see the book's edication, to see some sign that someone recognized what he had to offer. It gave me hope that his Bella recognized it too.

This was such a unique idea and a great way to explore loss. And you ended the way I think all pieces on mourning should—with a little bit of hope and a lot of love.

oh god that was adorable. in a very very sad way... and I love how Stephenie Meyer was in there :P

This is so sad, and so sweet. Well done. I'm verklempt.

The emotion certainly was there... very raw and touching. I loved it!

Waah. That was great! Not what I expected (which is a good thing!)

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"Please forgive me for what you have just read."

Forgive you? Why? I was about to thank you. That was... beautiful. And the whole idea totally made sense to me- the way that Stephanie (just a regular college student in this case) might want to write a story for the friend she lost, to give her a different ending. To stop the fictional van, if she couldn't stop the real one. I... I get that, I guess.

And Charlie. Wow.

"No father should ever outlive his children."

Have you ever seen the Lord of the Rings movies? If so, you know that one scene where Theoden (that king of Rohan who was kinda possessed by Saruman until Gandalf came along) wakes up from his enchantment or whatever, and discovers that his son has died? He visits the grave and breaks down, saying 'no parent should have to bury their child.' Makes me tear up every time. This story was about that heartbreaking.

And the way that Charlie was finally able to talk about Bella to a stranger who'd known her... and how talking about her helped him to remember more than just the bad memories of his last night with her and her death. I loved that. Really, truly, painfully beautiful.

The ending was very poignant as well. "Twilight again. But maybe this time, it was a new beginning, and not an ending." Wonderful. *sniff* Okay, I need to go find a tissue now. I think I've made my point. I love this story.

I hate to tell you this, as you seem to like Starbucks, but Stephenie Meyer probably doesn't drink coffee. She's LDS and there's a bit in our doctrine called the Word of Wisdom that says that coffee is bad for you. So she probably doesn't drink it. I'm not sure about Bella, but yeah. :)

Other than that, it's an interesting story, but I really don't understand how it fits. It's kind of odd and makes me wonder if you lost a friend to something like this.

Oh that was so SAD! But I loved it anyway. You did an amazing job with this oneshot- its too creative for words. Great job ;)