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Clyde Jeetos
2008-10-05
ch 14, anon.
abuseVery well written and very entertaining, I like how you have several sub plots running through the main story. I am slightly disturbed by this - "A violent and abusive childhood of course breeds a violent and abusive man" - a very narrow minded statement. Attitude such as this surely wouldnt be accepted in this highly tolerant almost utopian melting pot of races and culture you have described. You write of a extremely sophisticated society where differances are tolerated and encouraged but I feel based on a fair few odd moments of this story you feel there is no place for the mundane and average character.
Knives91
2008-10-03
ch 14,
abuseMost impressive. Like the change of pace. More please.
eddy_s
2008-10-03
ch 14, anon.
abuseStory's okay, too much reference on other shows/games, but as its mentioned in a somewhat passing comment, it's believable.

Can't wait to see what Cain would do to win the day, but as her ship is only minimally upgraded (compared to other super powered ships), her's is the most interesting of the subplots.

And I don't like the male on male romantic relations, but it's a personal thing, so i won't hold it against you.
everling
2008-09-27
ch 13, anon.
abuseNormally I avoid huge multi-crossovers, but frack, you tricked me! Now I'm here at chapter 13 and I find myself wanting to read more. Great work! Great characters!
JC
2008-08-09
ch 13, anon.
abuseThis is a good story buy why did combine all sci-fi into the Hegemony?

I like to see the Colonials geting saved but by individuals SCI-Fi shows,like a EA,s Fleet from the time of the Dilgar war.

I got idea for you after you end Rising star,The USS Saratoga From the 90s tv show Space:Above and Beyond,gets téléports to the Stargate,s universe in season 5,How would you think geting a Spaceship a year earlier chance things for the SGC?
Hope you update soon.
JC
2008-08-01
ch 13, anon.
abuseThis is great.

Polarocean can you give info HoS,s ships?
Agent-G
2008-07-29
ch 12,
abuseWell it's an okay story but there are a few things you should work on in future stories. First off we don't need such long winded explanations for every single piece of technology that you come up with. Sometimes I just skip it anyway because it's just boring, you don't need to go that in depth all the time. It just really slows down the story and really some of the stuff isn't needed and some of it I didn't even understand.

Although I would have been much more impressed with this story if you didn't go about just taking pieces from every kind of sci-fi genre. You took things from Star Wars, Gene Roddenberry's Earth Final Conflict and Andromeda, Farscape, Firefly and a few others, some I could only guess at. Honestly it just looks like you kind of ripped them all off, I mean do most of the stuff in the story were even put in the disclaimer that you used them?

Plus it gets really confusing, like the Leviathan's from Farscape don't have weapons so how can it be a warship and the way you described them doesn't match with what I'm familiar with in the show and it gets really confusing. Also the descriptions could also use a lot of work. Like saying "it looks like a plucked turkey/chicken" doesn't tell me anything. I can't see what you're trying to describe as I can't see that being used for ships.

It's odd since you go overboard in nonessential stuff in detail but leave out the essential stuff's details. I also had a hard time with all the weird symbols you used, it took me awhile to figure out that wasn't some error I was reading. I don't even know how you even put that into type to be honest.

But like I said I don't hate the story but with taking all of those parts from other sources it doesn't really show any imagination on your part. I normally really like it when they meet the Earthers but I like more originality in the story though.
JC
2008-07-24
ch 13, anon.
abuseThis is a great.

Hope you do more story Polarcean.
bhoy1888
2008-07-22
ch 13,
abuseloved the way this chapter reflected so many episodes... it made it familiar but different in so many ways. Loved it!!
dragonblack
2008-07-21
ch 13,
abuseHomeworld, Anybody? And the Bentusi? What did they ever do to you. I could unserdtand the higaran's or the Vaygar, but the bentusi? Also, it would be awsome of the Sajuk made an appearence.
EvilSpanker
2008-07-21
ch 13,
abuseIt's CIC not C&C. CIC stands for Combat Information Center, it's used on Warships in the Navy...unless you have it standing for something else?

Anyway, good chapters. I hope that Corman gets what's coming to him.
WBH21C
2008-07-21
ch 13,
abuseSWEET! Nice cliffhanger.
thecomputerroom
2008-07-21
ch 13,
abuseHolly shit station fourty six thousand kilometers long the colonials will certainly get a shock out of seeing that.
JovianJeff
2008-07-21
ch 13,
abuseWow! This chapter left me breathless. Great action, wonderful and amazing broad strokes of painting more of the setting and good pacing between the scenes. It was like a roller coaster ride with the end marvelous on two accounts. One the Guardians, I hope you do more with them and the second the way this ended as a chiller a set up that something worse is out there and really now that I type this a third point. It's sort of like a promise that this story could continue even beyond the Colonial/Cylon conflict and that's great news. I love this series!
Uberscribbler
2008-07-21
ch 13,
abuseOkay, most of the major plotlines are advancing. But we haven't seen what's happened to Helo recently, and could use a little more Boomer, and the politics of the galaxy are getting downright confusing.

Nice tying in of the "Razor" mythology. I can now add Thorne to my many concerns.

I hate to say it, but the sheer size of the cast makes it a challenge to follow who is doing what, when and what they actually look like. Could we get a 'Dramatis Personae' with the next chapter? There are still a few grammatical and spelling errors peppered throughout; nothing serious but second pair of eyes wouldn't hurt.

So much is happening, and from such simple decisions way back in the early chapters, I'm constantly in awe of the vision and imagination involved. Well done all around. The fact there are so many dangling plot-threads, each potentially being more significant than the next, leaves me breathless in waiting for the next chapter.

That and the fact I massively envy your word-count, but that's just me.
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