I like. I think the references to fire did sorta trigger the Mars image, though. Short but sweet. Link

I actually I knew from the beginning that it was Sailor Mars... Just because of all of the references to heat and fire... Anyway, I could tell that that was very rushed. It would have been interesting to see how the senshi were kidnapped and what happened. And you really should try describing the youma... and where did the youma come from? They don't appear randomly... somebody always sends them. PLus I noticed a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes... You ought to spell check your fic, read it over, and then have somebody else read it for proof reading. And you need to have more of a story... I ahve nothing against short stories, but their has to be more development... This seems like a good idea, but you ought to expand on it. Please keep these things in mind the next time you write a fic and you won't have me nit picking the fic. _

i knew it was her! the little things you said. "shook her hair," for one. cant be a senshi with short hair, mot likely anyways.