O a twist. I can't wait to see who she really is. Update soon please!

this is a very interesting story, keep going. You're one of the few writers that I've read that can drop the accents but still keep the character true. I'ts the way you do you're sentence structure. A lot of people who do it loose what makes the character who they are, like Race you have him down attitude wise,though I don't see him loosing his dinner that quickly but thats just my take on him lol. I'm looking forward to the next chapters.

I figured I'd better review if I wanted to read some more. This is a really good story and I have no idea where the plot is going so each chapter was a pleasant surprise.

Another good chapter. I like how you write from a different newsie's point of view every time, it makes it interesting. I thought you wrote Jack excellently, with his whole attitude about how he should come up with her name, because he was the leader lol. I love Jack (he's my 2nd favourite newsie) and I thought you definitely did him justice. I sure hope people decide to review because I want to read the rest of this! >:(

This is great so far, I'm really enjoying it =)

But I'm confused about one thing. Is Sarah still dating Jack, or have they broken up? Also, thanks for including her in the story. Most of the time authors either shove her aside and forget about her or worse, bash her.

Otherwise, besides a few grammatical problems, this is proving to be a wonderful story. Keep up the good work!

Sweet! Another Supernatural/Jensen/Newsies fan! Awesome. Can't wait to see that story. :) Anyway, loved it, once again. Love how you wrote David. Especially loved the bit about Sarah saying he acted enough like a girl for the both of them, and he found that highly offensive. LOL. Made me laugh. I can just imagine David saying that. Anyway, great job.
I posted a story on here about a week ago too, and only one person reviewed too... makes me wonder if there isn't a lot of people reading the stories in the Newsies part of this site... hm... anyway, I'm reading! :)

Wow! I really liked it. I'm so into this story already, and it's only the first chapter! Great job. I can't wait to see what happens, and see more of the boys. ;)