nice original character idea, but kind of a lame story. the fight was weak. jane didn't even use her powers. seems like this could have been better if it had been drawn out more and had more detail.

I love you! jk.

I bet when you checked your email you got excited, until you realized this comment was from ME.

Hey this prologue is great! If only you wrote more about Mark's plan!

Nino? Cool name!

*Rain

Is Mark supposed to be Nino?

You really have to UPDATE! This is a really good story!
Please continune!
-Stacie-Ann-

omg this is such an interesting story line! =) keep updating!
and pleease make alice have like a major problem with him because you know deep down that she would hate him so much for having a cooler future related gift. -crazed laugh-
xxALICE

wow. what a cool gift. so he can CHANGE the future? humf i bet alice doesnt like that. way to rain on her parade and all. *glares* hahaha =P but great story!

ps: omg your a guy? reading twilight?! omg i love you! hahahaa more guys should read it in my opinion. =D

xxALICE.

I really enjoyed this chapter. It's funny! I still have a nagging suspision that Ruthven is evil. How was Edward keeping Bella out of their room, since she's a vampire? LOVE IT!!

I like this story so far. But I don't know what it is about Ruthven, he seems kind of evil. Is he? Maybe I'm just weird. Lol. Please update soon.

its ok
it needs a twist
i know its the first chapter and you cant really develop much there but im just saying for the future chapters. You should make him a spy for the volturi that ran away or a mind controlling vampire that is there to convince the cullens to join the volturi.
i like new characters though so i was happy when i found your fanfic
keep writing
babydoll1425``

Absolutely love it.
Am loving the plot line so far. it's great. keep up the greaat work. :)

-YankeesFan12