Instantaneously 2008-04-20 . chapter 1I can't believe more people haven't reviewed this. There is not enough RR/DR fic on the web.
I think it all happened a bit quickly, but that's necessary if it's only a oneshot and you want to get as far as you did. Rodya's illness is definitely the easiest place to do this--an "omg what did I do" fic set after he recovers would be fun.
There are a few grammatical errors, but nothing that distracts from the story. I like it :) |