Reviews for Challenge Accepted

Lissa. 2008-03-31 ch 1, anon.	abuseI think that you write very well. Your story is incredible, and your description, and detail are remarkable. I do, however, would like to make a statement, or, critism, if you will, about the last chapter. I thought the sex scene was a little short, and non-passionate. The reader gets a brief, blunt description of their actions, but alas, one gets 'bored', per se, when the scene ends, and the reader is left thinking, "Wow...this is it? Well, that wasn't very sexy." I suggest, being a writer myself, that you try to extend these scenes, to give the reader the sense that your story had all the elements of a short-story, without the flaw of a dissappointing ending. That is just a siggestion to improve your writing skills, and imcrease the number of 'fans', if you must. Keep on writing those fanfictions, good luck! -Lissa
Pieholer 2008-03-13 ch 3, anon.	abuseWhat I meant about more to their story-- how did it go from just sex to romance?
Pieholer 2008-03-13 ch 3, anon.	abuseWOW! I have been hoping someone would write this story for a long time. You HAVE to keep going. There's so much more to their relationship than they showed -- You are an excellent writer and did a GREAT job with this!