Ah~ Another good fan-fiction.

I've been skimming through the forum and I've already written three good ones today, without a bad one.
O-o That's a rare occurrence.
There are no errors, (And if there are, they're minor enough that I didn't catch it with my eagle eye xP) and it's very well written. The humor was put in very well, too.
I loved the section about Himeka Karasuma~ She's one of my favorite characters, and she's so cute.~ ;D
Good job~ xD
~Random-tan

Aww! I don't think I've ever read a fanfic about Himeka Karasuma... That is absolutely adorable! I love how Kirio was so paranoid... Another great one-shot!

Wow...Himeka Karasuma to da RESCUE!xD
Haha...y'know,if u give sunblock to a 3 year old,it'll probily end u doing wat Himeka did!xD
(But u dont know...the 3 year old would probily eat it or something...o.O')
But still,LOL!xDD Plz update! -Ashi

Lovely writing, no spelling/grammar errors, everybody's in character... I love it.

' "I don't think I could wish for anything more right now...than to see the sunset with you, Kazune."

Of course, maybe I'd wish for some eel bread, too. '

Lol, I love that part. I hope you are going to make it a series of one-shots, because this one was awesome.

Oh...is the story over..?o.o'
Cuz wat u said at the end was as if this was just a Oneshot thingy...>.>'
Eh,oh well.But plz,if it really isnt the end,plz update it soon again!
Im really starting to luv this story!x3 -Ashi

This story is very interesting and it sounds so professional. You could lighten up a bit on that, but otherwise keep up the googd work.