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bdun
2009-08-22 . chapter 15
on rare occasions, i come across a beautifully written story of epic win. like this.
lollipop dictator
2009-08-12 . chapter 3
Aw! :D
LOL Cute story, but I'm really hoping for some bone-breaking and gut-ripping violence...xD
Oh well.
Nanner Monkey
2009-07-31 . chapter 3
Okay: first review; better make this a good one...

*ahem*

This story is going pretty damn well along. Unfortunately, it seems to be heading in a Hollywood cliché direction, so I hope things progress in a less predictable manner in chapters to come.

A small issue I've found is that your "Southerner" sounds like a typical Californian or some dick from Wyoming. Now, if he was from Georgia or Alabama, I might understand, but that is just crass, assuming that that's a typical Virginian.

*end of wierd rant*
IVIaedhros
2009-07-25 . chapter 15
It often feels...underdeveloped, like you were trying to rush through and show too much too fast...yet, it was a very enjoyable read. I was quite surprised you killed off the supposed main character.
Scaper32
2009-06-14 . chapter 15
It was good. Lost a little interest in the last two chapters though
Showtime
2009-03-09 . chapter 1
You really like the movie "Aliens." I can certainly tell that. Too many references to same movie. Dialogue is a little frantic. Interesting details leaking out. I think there is too much probing into why actions are happening. example: The phone began to ring again, most likely Christina calling to talk some sense into her. The suspense of the phone ringing is great enough. She's leaving her friend behind...that's pretty dramatic within itself. Her family life seems like not a very strong reason to stay on the surface. Maybe if Christina used her own family as a crutch for her not wanting to start adventuring again. Seems a little whiny. If the character is supposed to be frightened, she can be frightened, just not whiny.

All in all it's rough, but interesting. I always love the skeletons of your stories. The small tension builders are good. :) How far are you into this one already?
HalleysComet
2009-03-03 . chapter 15
Hey that was good.Bravo.Im adding you to my favorites:)
R34P3R
2009-03-01 . chapter 15
May I use some of your ideas for my "multigame" fic (at least if I have time to write it XD)
R34P3R
2009-03-01 . chapter 15
One of the best stories I've read so far,but the end is kinda confusing. Good Job anyway
IgnorantOne
2009-02-25 . chapter 15
Wow. I will say that I am at a loss for words at this work.

This was the best video game based fanfiction I have ever read. Ever. Seriously.

Despite how things turned out, I really wished that less of the marines would have died, especially Lieutenant Dan...it sucks that even after having his face burned off he gets a big ** hole drilled into him by an Angel Big Daddy...and it sucks that Kate decided to start a war in order to live out her dreams. *sigh*

It was an excellent story, and I give it five stars. Its a shame that Melissa died...and that Mike was turned into a Big Daddy as well. I think that it would suck to live forever in a suit.

*Sigh again* For some reason I really don't feel like doing anything more for the rest of the day. Thanks a lot for making me want to just go to bed and think about this story. XD
Vault Avatar
2009-02-15 . chapter 2
UNIQUE... I'm gonna read the whole thing if I can! :)
Rickmer
2009-01-26 . chapter 15
A very excellent story.

I envy you for your ability to tell such a difficult tale.


Kudos to the author. Hope you write more like this.
The Starry Sky
2009-01-20 . chapter 15
aww, it`s finished? ;A; i`m sorry i didn`t review the other chapters, but i was a very faithful reader.

i swear, though, this story was absolutely beautiful, and with such an original and innovative plot too. normally, the bioshock stories here on (and even on deviantart) would be ripped off from the original game.:I but you managed to go beyond the stereotype, and i congratulate you on a job well done.C: it was a great conclusion to a great story.*tears of mixed feelings*

please keep writing, since you are now officially one of my favorite fanfic authors.
ErnestTheGuy
2009-01-14 . chapter 15
that was good. i have a 360 but i havent player BioShock yet. i kinda want to but i really dont want to spend the money.lol. cant wait for more of your work.
Wolfinson
2009-01-14 . chapter 15
-Whistles- Whoo, that's some story roght there. I give it five stars.
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