Heartbreaking. I felt like crying.

Wow! That was short but so powerful. So so horribly sad. Poor Iola. It wasn't supposed to be that way. *sniff*

Oh my gosh. This fic completely twisted at my heart. Its sad because they are just having a regular fight and it turns into so much more than that. I've also never seen a fic from Iola's prespective before. Poor Joe. Poor Iola. Now I'm sad.

*sniffles* Oh, Iola...

I've read pieces related to DoT before, but this one really stands out to me. This snippet really reminded me that Iola is just a teenage girl, dealing with normal feelings of anger and insecurity. It also reminded me that Joe, no matter how mature or experienced he is supposed to be, is still just a 17 year old boy, with the typical 17 year old male hormones. Something that should have been just a typical "lovers' spat" between highschool sweethearts turned out horribly because of circumstances beyond their control. Poor Iola. Poor Joe. :(

Thanks for sharing!

Yes! You posted this! It's so rare to get Iola's POV in fanfic, that it's a treat when it's done.

Especially heart-rending (but only because we know the outcome in advance) is Iola's resolve to really spite Joe by taking off - making sure he knows she's 'leaving' and that she's 'gone'.

If she'd only known...

Great pov from Iola. Interesting start.

aww, this totally brought me back to the first time I read that book! sad memories, but excellent writing!

O, MY GOSH!

That's a horrible thing! And so well done it almost made me cry! This was amazing - you should do so many more HBCF companion pieces.

oh my gosh.. I didn't reply to this earlier (sorry about that.. I've been SO busy). But this just kills me. It's so so sad cause you know the outcome. You know what's going to happen.. and you want to scream at Iola to stop! To not go to the car, to turn around, just this once, and go back to Joe. To let him "win."

And you can't. Cause you know the outcome.

This was really really good and really touching. Really sad. *sniffle*

Kudos to you.. I can't say enough to show you how I loved this.. but then... it's all angsty... I love it.

Wow. I've never read Dead on Target, but to read this story, I can see all too well in my mind how this must have played out. And I doubt the book gave us insight into Iola's thoughts at that moment the way you did. You had her very well-balanced between the outraged girlfriend and the insecure teenager who's still hoping that her boyfriend will come after her, despite the fact that she was the one to stalk off. And to know that it ended in such tragedy for her makes this story, especially the last line, all the more poignant. I'm so glad you posted this!