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| fiona1987 2008-07-22 ch 8,  | abuseExcellent :) |
| loveonspeedial 2008-07-19 ch 8, | abuseMy goodness! So much mystery going on. Excellent chapter. |
| IKeepGoldFishInMyBra 2008-07-07 ch 7, | abuseWhat happens next?!?!?!?! Please write more:D |
| JJ Rust 2008-06-17 ch 2, | abuseNot bad. I was a bit confused at the scene where Buck and Dick cross paths. It almost sounded like Buck couldn't be scene by anyone. Quite a few grammar mistakes. More commas are needed in sentences where there is a natural pause. Reading it aloud may help with that. Also it should be "Easy Company's CO" instead of "Easy Companies CO." I did like Fey's thoughts toward the end regarding the different characters from "Band of Brothers," and how that helps with her final decision to aid them. |
| iHedge 2008-06-14 ch 7, | abuseGood chapter--captured the essence of battle perfectly, for me. Grim stuff. |
| loveonspeedial 2008-06-14 ch 7, | abuseAn interesting angle. Anxious for more. Update soon! |
| JJ Rust 2008-05-22 ch 1, | abuseHey, this was pretty cool. Fey has a definitive voice and you make her a real flesh and blood woman with the way you write her thoughts. I also thought the real place dreams bit and her fear over them was a nice touch. Well done. Will continue on with this. |
| THE DEADLY ANGEL 2008-05-17 ch 6, | abuseGetting betta love it so far keep up the good work |
| Y'lime Redriver 2008-04-14 ch 6, | abuseSo far the story is fresh and unique. Be careful though at this point it would be easy (no pun intended) to topple into Mary Sueism. I hope you don't mind me saying that. Many people don't have the sense to see what is meant as helpful advice. |
| Sweet A.K 2008-04-07 ch 4, | abuseDid you know that in chapter 5 you hade Roe refer to Buck as Sergeant? He a Lt. |
| Sweet A.K 2008-04-03 ch 5, | abusePlease, hurry up and update, especially if it is going to be a Speirs/oc fic! I've been dying to read one! Update soon! |
| WETSU 2008-04-03 ch 5, | abuseIt has my attention. What's next? |
| Ciao Roma 2008-04-02 ch 5, | abuseI really like this story so far, and I eagerly await any updates. But wasn't D-Day in 1944? |
| The Deadly Angel 2008-03-22 ch 4, anon. | abuseStill Brilleant From what u wrote You r on the right track and u got that scene just right Good going TDA |
| Isaboo 2008-03-21 ch 4, | abuseI extend hearty congratulations on your ability to accept criticism. I've received so many responses along the lines of "You suck, and you're wrong, and I don't have to proofread!" (only with more spelling errors). I'm looking forward to more posts on your story, it's all alerted and stuff. By the way, my own writing is far from perfect...however, you'll be happy to know that thinking about how your character was reacting, and how in other stories the characters have reacted actually led me to post a chapter in a story of my own...check it out if you want, but keep in mind it was 2am when I wrote it...(sleep is wimps!) |