Aw...so sweet! I can totally imagine this happening!

OH my gosh! this is soo good. you should make into a story and not a one shot.that is if it is a one shot. You should make the girl and bella's fate intertwine forever. Well not as a vampire. Yet. but. its just a suggestion.

I like that story. Are you going to add to it? You should, there are so many possibilities. You are truly gifted, keep up the great work.

That was really sweet!