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Reviews For: In the Book

Seraphania 2008-05-16 ch 2,	abuseThis is really interesting. Please write more!
The One Called Demetra 2008-04-06 ch 1,	abuse"Did I mention she's a Gregor and Twilight freak? Well, she is." Just about every "bad" Mary Sue I-dropped-into-a-book has a summary like that. It makes the story sounds corny, and like you just inserted yourself in the book. I would suggest changing it. The events moved lightning quick. Slow it down and describe more. At the moment it looks like you wrote a sentence and hit enter. Ellie doesn't really sound all that surprised at finding herself in an impossible situation. "That means three times, Gregor, stay with Luxa here" ...yeah, better take that out. Gregor in the books wasn't an idiot. That was just something we all TUC-fanatics assumed because it was funny. I'm sorry, but Ellie is looking like a Sue. I suggest you look over your character again and rewrite. Do I sound mean? Well I am mean. I don't sugar coat reviews.
Wafflesrocmyboxers 2008-03-27 ch 2,	abuseThat's good!
idestroyuall 2008-03-27 ch 2,	abuseawesome luff the story
idestroyuall 2008-03-14 ch 1,	abusethis was awesome are you going to do the whole seirs like this? oh oh an if you are you could change the ending :)
metime00 2008-03-14 ch 1,	abusefunny
Wafflesrocmyboxers 2008-03-13 ch 1,	abuseHEHE! She is exactly like Ripred! Gosh that's funny! Update ASAP!