Wow.

I sat in my office at work and kept reading with eyes wide open. Great story. Very good work.

Great stuff mate! I confess my blood ran cold while I read your novella, but I couldn't stop reading it. Just sat there all night holding my breath and called in sick the next day at work (or I would've called in sick, but I used up all my sick leave, so I just called in "dead" - that seemed to confuse the receptionist!)

I think your plot twists, throwing in some aspects of the modern remake into the original Doom storyline, made this one turn out better that any version I've ever read, fanfic or otherwise. But there was one thing you never explained: how did the bulldogs and imps get from one Phobos complex to another? Obviously, they couldn't wear envirosuits and going outside naked would've popped them like balloons. Were there passages from one complex to another that were sealed shut?

If I may make a suggestion, maybe the follow-up could contain a flashback of what precisely occurred in Hell during the first TDG experiments, as in what the demons saw from their viewpoint, and what the first two unlucky marines saw, just to add an extra spice to things.

And going out on a limb here, but I'm guessing we haven't seen the last of Sarge?

Jim'Van

Quite interesting. As a veteran of the first Doom game, I can readily imagine the base layout, especially that infernal Central Command maze. It seems like you mixed in elements of episodes Shores of Hell and Inferno, especially the part about the squishy floors and the Cacodemons being like "living limpet mines". After reading the various parts about the human victims hanging from walls and ceilings, I may never look at Doom the same way again. If I saw what Rowlins did, I would probably want to shoot myself too.

You seemed to put a LOT of detail into this twisted journey into darkness. Considering the dark nature of the Doom series, the twisted journey part is taken for granted, but nevertheless you seemed to put quite a lot of effort into describing it all. It pays off in giving any reader (especially a Doom veteran) a glimpse into the nightmare the Phobos base had become. I felt fear alongside the character, prayed for some measure of salvation alongside him, and felt the exhilaration of finally ripping into Hell's minions with (presumably) the BFG-90 or the Plasma Rifle. Very good work you have here... thanks for writing it!

That was fantastic. ^_^ Soo well written and very well put together. Thanks for sharing.

This is a fine piece of work. I can tell a lot of thought went into this one. The meanderings and descriptions of the marine are vivid, atmospheric and chilling. I sincerely hope there is more of this type of work to come. Very well written indeed. Very creative and clever. You should be proud of this one.

One nit pick, at chapter 12, change percussion grenade to concussion grenade. I think that's what you meant.

AWESOME!
SIMPLY AWESOME!
The Demons need to breath?
Adrian Romero? XD
You just took elements of both Classic Doom and Doom 3, and put it all together in the best Doom Fic that I have seen.
GREAT JOB!