Wow! Thanks to Lucky's skill at the Whack-a-mon game amy was able to get a porygon

That is some skill Lucky has. That makes his name very ironic.

i love Leviathan's names! it so suits the gigantic pokemon!

Will Amy make? She's got to make it...right?

I was bitting my nails through the whole chapter. there were times that i thought Lucky and Arrow were goners.


I really think Amy should open her own gym after she is done with her journey

Though I'm tempted to say exactly what you said to me back to your own story, I won't. Instead, I'll show you what a critique should be like.

I think that you're using a lot of great descriptions, but the beginning seems a bit slow - more dialogue would help. I realize it's just showing us what is happening, but despite that, I think that it could stand a little dialogue to break it up.

One thing I noticed is that Nurse Joy says that the Growlithe is, once in its Pokeball, in need of a trainer since it cannot be released. I was under the impression that they *could* be released. (See episode "Bye Bye, Butterfree" for reference, as well as the games where you are given an option to release them.)

There are a few small problems in dealing with grammar, punctuation, etc, but overall it is written pretty well, I have to admit.

Then there is the Skarmory...Skarmory are human-sized, no? Winona's is, at least. Maybe it's special? I don't know. But in any case, Skarmory doesn't seem like it could fit in Amy's bag, unless it's like one of those magic ones in Harry Potter? That could explain it...

Battle scenes are pretty full of descriptions and I don't see anything that is majorly wrong with them.

I'm only on chapter five, but at the moment I have prior obligations. I will be returning shortly to finish my critique. Ta!

LOL! This chapter, although short, was hilarious! I hope to read your update soon!

YAY! I have a Tyranitar on my team of Pokemon. I really like your story!

I like how amy came up with Arrow's name. A Skarmory's feathers are as sharp as an arrow so it work out perfectly.

I hope she does well in the doubles tournemnet

The rain was expressing bailey's feelings

Another amazing chapter. Update soon.

Oh poor Tyranitar! I am glad tat Amy got a Larvitar but I wish it wasn't under those circumstances. poor little thing.

I don't think it would be right for Amy to take Napper away from his mom. I think she will do much better with the growlithe she saved.


I love the idea of the heal ball!

Eioah!~ drama. drama. drama. I bet leigh will be amy's battling partner for round three, that shall be interesting! Anyway, great chapter! SO happy to see the update! i think i died for a while after that long wait!

cooll,a new friend. I like him, he seems nice. I hope he ends up not being a grunt for team rocket or some thing. I like hows he's a bird trainer, you don't see those that ofteten in fics, can't wait to see how Amy does in her next battle.