Awh it was cute. I really like how you wrote it :3

Awww it's sweet! :)

excellent story! it made me cry! when she walked away i was like 'NO'

aw very sweet. heehee you just got to love fluff lol, this brightened up my day considerably, well done, I'd love to see more!

This story was one of your finer works, I appreciated the plot and introspective in the beginning. While I also applaud your use of Japanese vocabulay, the way you add it makes the story harder to enjoy unless you are bilingual. You put the meanings of the words in at the end so when you come to the wording in Japanese you have to scroll down to desipher it and then read the section over to repaint the scenery.

If you did something like this

Masato /elegant man/ it would make the reading experience better, make sense?

Thank you very much, my dear friend. _

Quite the tender little story you have here; Adorable and it pulls at the heart strings somewhat, because it makes you wonder what will become of this little charming moment and if she will succeed or fail. (In short, whether their dreams come true or if they are crushed into the dust) In that way, that little unresolved plot twist makes this story special in its own little charming way. _

Ahem- Very good for a one shot, and the characters are well thought and believable. Great job, friend! :D

-I.P. (Yamiko)

PS: (Forgive the late review; slept in and went to see 10,0 BC)