What I don't get is, why does Akane seem to have such a condescending air about the whole deal? She was the one whoring herself out, another thing I find a bit hard to believe since she has her martial pride, on top of her view of "perverted" behaviour.

Felt really bad for Ranma here. Yes, they both made mistakes but he was the only party who hadnt resorted to adultery and voluntarily hurting the other. It would be nice knowing what happens next.

Sweet! This is a great little what if... what if, the characters in a Manga were real? How would the cartoonish, violent, static relationships portrayed really play out?

Good work!

HA

Damn! What a b%tch!
I hated and loved this fic.
Hated it because i'm a sucker for happy endings when it comes to Ranma 1/2...
Loved it cuz its original, and really realistic, and Ranma here, is the victim, not just from Akane, but from life itself.
Great piece, i'm adding it to my faves.

This is such a sad story! You must be really sad when you think of this. But I like it. Is different from the other stories.

Pretty good, might be productive to expand it into a ficlette series with introspections from various other parties, like Nabiki, Kasumi, and Soun.

indeed i enjoyed it a lot... a pretty real approach to their situation, no comunication, no relationship...
really good but couldn't you write something else?

Wow, Akane is a real Bi*&ch in this one. Poor Ranma.

Meh. Well written, as usual, but I kept hoping that there would be a resolution. I'm a sucker for a happy ending... usually stay away from unhappy fics. Bah.
Oh well, whatever gets your creative juices flowing, I guess. Keep up the good writing.

I really liked the angst in this story, and although I love Ranma and Akane to end as a happy couple it's good to read something sad and with a bit of drama in once in a while :)
I hope that you are thinking in continuing this, it could make a really good story and even if they manage to patch up things and end together or if Akane somehow convinces him to get a divorce, either way it will prove interesting to read!

love the angst of this all and i'm so curious how things will end... update soon.

If you wanted frustration, regret, and er- exhaustion to be felt, then good job. Pretty angsty.

Not your usual filet of char-broiled comedy, I'll definitely say that. Damn... I'm sad now.

A good start, and all to like what would happen if they had married. Stupid fathers, self-centered grand master, they ruined to kids. I hope there is a light at the end of this tunnel, and it is not a train about to run them over. I also hope you deal out some pain of some sort to the "adults" in the story, genma, soun, nodoka, and happosai. I typed the names in all small letters because they are small people, not worthy of respect. I am adding this to my story alerts.

Nice one.

Though it still raises a question that has to be asked in all these type of fics: why wouldn't he go into sports oder some other kind of business where his art might be of advantage (and would pay more)? Anything goes, right? Technically, Happosai as the grandmaster could forbid it, but I rather doubt it. And why would he not be able to use construction as a form of training? With all the weird styles in the manga, one might actually conceive some sort of fanon "Anything Goes construction working" - defeat of Happosai may be possible. Though it wouldn't change the outcome that much.

The emotional part of this shows that money isn't everything. The job holds Ranma back and Akane's teasing creates resentment. The immaturity of both fails the relationship. Nevertheless, I doubt that Akane would start sleeping around that fast to hurt Ranma. They may not be able to communicate, but they have their honor as martial artists and I find it difficult to imagine Akane, with her rather generalized "pervert"-view cheating to get back at Ranma. That's an area where she would hesitate.

That being said, your storytelling is well done with the changing times - the telephone dialogue and the memories caused by it. Grammar is good (as far as I can judge that) and so on. Since it's short, the reader doesn't lose the interest, but even so, one wants to know what happened and finds this revelation just at the end.

So, apart from one or two logical errors (though I just wondered if putting Ranma in a real-world-scenario isn't a logical error in itself;-), a well written short piece. Now get back and continue "What's in a name", would you please?

Thanks for writing,
Just in Jest

You know, I think you hit on everything that I thought was wrong with the Ranma/Akane relationship, and while a lot of folks say that they do love each other, unless there's a lot of growth in the characters after the canon ends, if the two of them were to marry, then it'd be a disaster, unfortunately, imo. The problem is, that while two people might love each other, it takes a lot of work and followup to make a real marriage work, and at the time I finished with canon, I was actually glad they hadn't got together, as I would see this coming, divorce or seperation. There's probably going to be others that disagree, but this is what I saw when I read the way that the manga(and worse, the anime) going. Very well done, sad and bittersweet.