The only thing I found strange was that Kanda's hands were smooth. He uses his sword so much they should be rough and calist.

Please write more!

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I really like the story, but why are the quotation marks arrows?

EGAD this story is awesome, please update soon! :]

a very good beginning ! the found the Innocence, what will happen ?

NU! i really NEED to know what happens! oh no! will they think allens dangerous since his arms obviously going to turn into a CLAW for gods sake! i mean i would be freaked out! oh by the way what innocence does he have? his claw or crowned clown?

More I must have MORE!

Woah! Great story! Please update!

WAow!

That's something!

I love your story!

I hope the next chapter will be up soon!

Thanks for the good story!

I don't know if I can agree with your characterization of Allen. He is portrayed as a naive, clueless boy who isn't able to survive on his own. Which is definitely not the case.

Allen is able to get along and talk with various kinds of people and it isn't often that he is tongue-tied. Allen can also fight.

I think your fanfiction has a lot of potential but your Allen kind of ruins it for me.

keep going -

though lack of yullen but this chapter is still interesting :D

and i'm hoping more for the upcoming ones too :D

Viva yullen _

Gah, yay for a long chapter! Please update soon!

oh boy i would have ran after them

now this..IS AWESOME!

please update...i'll give you a cookie if u do..