Poor Grissom would have a heart attack! Chapter 2 coming soon?

Great will there be a chapter 2

NO!! Don't end it now!
Keep going, please!
It's great...
Want to know more...
Keep going...
please...

:D It's great!

CJS-DEPPendant

great, please write more soon, great story, i have a skirt exactly like sara's but i don't wear it, anyway, i'm rambling so i'll say goodbye. Goodbye.

More!!

LOVE IT! Please continue!! soon!

wendy

interesting!
plz more more more! xD

This story has potential but needs some work. The dialog is not punctuated properly. A example of this: “Grissom.” Catherine hiss not believing him. SHOULD BE “Grissom,” Catherine hiss not believing him. There is also some funky capitalization going on. Words like Birthday and Thirty are capitalized when they should be: “Happy Birthday Greg.” Sara says SHOULD BE “Happy birthday Greg,” Sara says. As a reader, these are really distracting. I can't get past them to get to the story. As a reader, I'm also not a fan of the present tense. I'm not certain, after giving it a good try at reading, why present tense was chosen over past. There doesn't seem to be any reason in the story to make that particular style choice.

omg great chapter!

oy vey!..what is grissom gonna do?...ha...loved the first chpter!..update soon :D