 Schermionie 2008-06-11 . chapter 1You have a number of issues with grammar, but I will say that this is pretty much my favourite story using this concept, in any category I've read it. The situation just works so well for the both of them! D is incredibly cute and I just love the simple way it's written. I think it would probably have been better if D had typed either his name or Leon's into the search engine instead of "pet shop". Maybe Leon could have been telling him about "the wonders of the internet" and how you can find out anything on there, and D felt like proving him wrong or something.
Anyway, I really do love it! |
 Kayi Rowling 2008-03-17 . chapter 1It'd have been worse if Leon had said: "How do they know we kiss?" XD ...hehehehe, I'm so mean ^-^
On top of that, being a compu geek, hearing of newbie users makes me smile :D (they're all so cute and innocent!! :3 ...until they start cussing at you XD)
Nice one, as I had said of the little scene before this was developed entirely, but, sorry to say, you have some spelling mistakes (mostly missing letters, as in "widow," where it is "window") |