Reviews for Through defenses

green see-through ghosts
2008-03-31
ch 1,

abuseTaking you up on the offer, thanks very much!

I like the line in the beginning...A slow breeze rushed through the streets, stirring up random abandoned food wrappings. The trees seemed to hiss as the wind brushed through the fat green leaves...because of the modern/nature type comparison. It made me think. I can identify with Sakura at the end, knowing you've got to do something that you're not strong enough to actually do.

It's good; I think you've nailed Sakura's character down, though Jiraiya seemed a little...weird. I mean, for all his pervertedness, it's still hard to imagine him embracing a student...but this is still fun. The ending line is good; it makes me think that Sakura is already equipped with everything she needs to bring Sasuke back. Like, becoming more physically stronger won't really help; it's her iron will that will do the job. Nice!

Hakusgirl Katsuko
2008-03-17
ch 1,

abusei liked it! though i have no clue else what to say... -_-;;

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