"The subject line said, “Who’s Julia?” and the message when opened contained just one sentence: “Is she hot?”'

LOL! Fun story, I enjoyed the OC point of view here, since it was David and gave us more of an insight into John and his pre-Atlantis life. I like what you did with the David character; it would have been so easy to make him into a total jerk just based on canon. You made him likeable as well as sympathetic. And I see there is already a sequel, so I guess now I don't have to beg for one. ;)

I actually have to say, I like this story better than "Scavengers." It's written with a better flow and tightness that makes for a very enjoyable read. Also like the WAFFY ending you got there. I'm now off to read "My Brother's Keeper" and hopefully will enjoy the sequel to this. ^_^ Great job!

-Shadow Chaser

Hahahaha. I had to stop reading just to review this latter part of the chapter. I love that you made David not so complacent or "oh my God John's dying I have to help" type of person and even still kept some of his doubt and disdain for his brother and Shep's colleagues in there, especially regarding Keller. Great job and great dialogue. Okay, finishing up the rest of the story!

-Shadow Chaser

I absolutely love this story! I have read it 3 times and starting it again. You did an excellent job!

What an awesome story! Good character reps and a great storyline. There were several scenes, especially the chair scene, that had me almost gasping for breath. I was worn out from Sheppard and drones. You have a wonderful talent for storytelling, please keep up the work.

I really enjoyed this story. Seeing John through his brother's eyes was a great angle. John's interactions with Jennifer and Lorne were great additions. It all seemed so possible and would have made a really facinating episode. I would have loved to see more bystanders find out about Atlantis.

Seeing David gain respect for his brother and be in awe of the responsibility, respect and family he had earned was a fun read.

*whistles* Wow, that was a very gripping and excellently plotted story! It would have made the perfect mid-season two part cliffhanger for season 5, if only TPTB would ever take in fan submissions for story lines. I'm just glad that this story was recced on Live Journal and that I got to read it. Thank you for sharing this, I greatly look forward to reading more of your things.

Speaking of such things, do you have any published original fiction anywhere? If so, I'd love to read it!

...slightly shocked to discover after all this time I can remember my login and password. I haven't been on it ages upon ages. *coughs* Anywho, on with the review.

This story was recced over on livejournal, and I thought I'd give it a go, along with its sequel. I have to say, I quite enjoyed it. I liked the outsider's view of Atlantis, and that there was still the danger and the hype associated with Atlantis, regardless of its visitor.

Very well done. :)

Fabulous story...

You described the characters so well that I could imagine the scenario you were describing in my head.

I always thought that the writers should have gone into JS family more - they could take a tip from your writing.

I really enjoyed it

Excellent story. I had toread the whole story at one setting. It is now 4:45 in the morning.


Karon

This is very good. If you have a follow to it I will enjoy reading it as well.

I'm very sorry to see the story end. I greatly enjoyed it and your characterizations. Thank you for sharing with us.

I really loved Jen and John's interaction. And John and David's too. Wonderful.

Again, I like how you are able to make us feel happy about putting David in his place (I don't really like that phrase in this situation, but it is the closest I can come up with at the moment) while at the same time have us understand David's POV and be sympathetic towards him. You don't make David out to be the one dimensional black hat.

David knew so much, and so little, all at the same time. They had never been close. But they had been brothers. And now David understood that despite ten years of silence, shame and exile, they still were.

I really enjoyed this introspection of David's. You do such an excellent job with the character portrayals. I'm really enjoying the fic.