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| Nate 2008-07-19 ch 1, anon. | abuseNot to bad little over kill with the godamns and the phonys. I tend to think of holden as more of a shy depressed quiet guy rather than an obnoxious badass. |
| missdespair1177 2008-06-24 ch 1,  | abusewell this is really good ay, sounds exactly like Holden, though i'm sure he wouldn't try pick up one of the office lady's lol. awesome keep up the writing :) |
| Lugian-Holly Before Swine 2008-05-29 ch 1, | abuseOh wow. Gotta love Holden. Nice job. XD -Lu |
| September's Nobara 2008-05-07 ch 1, | abuseI found most of it to be quite in character, though the reiteration of D.B. being a scriptwriter/'prostitute' in this story seemed a bit much. Additionally, good work on maintaining the stream of consciousness flow the original novel had. I did notice a few odd typos, and I'm surprized Holden had it in him to say all that, as he considers himself a coward. Nicely done, all in all! Take care, ~September's Nobara. |
| la 2008-05-02 ch 1, anon. | abusehaha, perfect! love ya Holden |