This was pretty good, I liked it.

That was magical!! I love the Phantom of the Opera, and I let out a happy little squeal every time you quoted the song in the story. Anakin is so similar to the Phantom, and it makes me happy to know that in your story, Padme chooses to join Anakin and work with him the darkness. They would be a powerful, mysterious, beautiful couple together, Lord and Lady Vader. Excellent job!

you stole from phantom of the opera shameon you.may God have mercy on your soul.the phantom of the opera and star wars is never to be laced tog

Very nice. I am not familiar with the song, but it's a moody, eerie story.

Well done!
I really see how you wove the song and Star Wars together.
I very much enjoyed it and could picture it all in my mind clearly and hear the song playing along.

Wow! Your short story is great! Very well written and descriptive. I was being seduced right along with Padme, increadibly powerful. I could also feel Padme's hesitance as well as her willingness to follow him anywhere...I would feel the same! Very well done! Good job! I like the whole premise. Being seduced by the dark side is so very tempting and delicious and you prove that well in this story!

:D I can see how you wove the song into it. I loved it.

Wow, her feelings are powerful and almost tangible the way you've painted the experience. Oh, how I wish we could hear her perspective when she finally looks at his face. However, that is part of the mystery that makes this story good.

good story!

Whoa kind of phantom of the opera mostly
Maria

Wonderfully written!

wow!

This is a very lovely piece that you have written! I really like the way you wrote Padme's emotions, and the way she goes to Vader.They interact well, you should be proud of this! Great job!