I know this story is from two years ago, and that all I know about Dune is a small bief bit I've seen of the first film but all in all its pretty good.

'WALK WITHOUT RHYTHM AND YOU WONT ATTRACT THE WORM'

FatBoy Slim, Weapon of Choice right?

Dune is often said to be the sci fi version of fantasy Lord of the Rings. Both are masterworks, written by great writers, and have excellent main & minor characters.

Main difference: LOTR: 22 388 fics. Dune: 40. !

Even tiny LOTR characters like Grima or Ioreth (!) have their own fanfics, sometimes their own fanclub! Strangely, none cares to write about Dr Yueh, Piter de Vries or Hwi Noree. Why? Could it be because a Mary Sue would look kinda dumb in Dune universe (imagine the Sue flirting with a Guild agent because she can’t afford a space travel, or lost in the desert with Paul and Jessica… urgh)? Think about it! We need Dune fics! Fellow Dune lovers, do something!

You need a grasp of logic in the universe of Dune.

Frank Herbert knew what he wrote and filled his story with philosophy and politics and more.

Read The Dune Chronicles, it might help.

PS: Dune: House Series suck. (They were written by Brian Herbert and Kevin J. Anderson.)

Pretty good story however the House Richese ruled Dune in a semi-fief until about 50 years before the events of Dune: House Atredies

Remember, House Harkonnen gained control of Dune after House Richese, and that ownership of Dune was a favor bestowed by the Emperor.

VERY GOOD. PLEASE DO MORE

I really enjoyed your story. Thanks so much for writing it. _

Interesting story, but I don't think the Bene Gessarit would bump off someone unless he threatened the whole Sisterhood. There are some spelling errors, but nothing major. If Monet Kern wanted to do her own agenda, I at least think someone else in the BG Sisterhood would know her plans.