*laugh* Cute! I like this idea! Although, your writing style is hard to read sometimes. Who are you when you say, "I"? And try not to flip between script style writting and story style writting.

Poor Hatsuharu...Good job! It was hilarious!

XD XD XD XD XD ! XP

omg that was really funny! poor haru...i feel bad for him...
i think you should do wendy's for the next chapter! i am surprised that momiji didnt go play in the kids land though, that sounds like something he'd do!

Cool story.

But I just wondering yeah, um...like when are you going to update this story or you just said that and forgot.










P.S I hope I didn't get you mad..but if I did, sorry yah.

Lol, I forgot that I actually reviewed a couple of your stories in March XD. Well I'm gonna read more
~Myst

Things I liked:
o.O Is Haru-kun gonna eat a cow? XD Yay! He's not eating beef! - I love that scene poor Haru is going to watch his friends being eaten
Good characterisation
I hope that they'll be okay
Great descriptions
Aww Momiji gets a kid meal - cute! ^o^
Poor Kyo-kun made a mess XD
*tilts head to the side* The prices seem accurate, did you write this in: マクードナルド。(Mac Donalds)

Ways to improve:
Try not to repeat words or phrases
Add more nonverbal communications
It seems that you sometimes skip over words

Really liked reading it
~Myst
Things that I didn't like:
I'm really unsure who you are in the story 0.0
I'd like to see Aya a little more over-the-top
Do you get a lot of girl in school? 0.0 - sorry I have a dirty mind

that was interesting! the cast at McDonalds... everyone wonders what characters would do in real life situations! (I know you do! Don't lie to me!) Anyways good job!

Haha! That was funny! Make them go to Burger King next! I would have a whole plot for it! XD
Peace,
Nami

Mc Donald's Mc Donald's Kentucky Fried Chicken And A Pizza Hut! ^_^!

LMFAO!! i couldn't help but fall out of my chair when i read haru saying the sandwhich was made out of cow...im never ordering a burger again...lol, but i could just imagine a chibi haru saying that! lol, plz write more!

that was cute. my favorite line is " more like taking away his man pride". lol. that was funny!

ahh i love this!

this is col! CAn u have a chap. where they r in France? It would be funny with everyone speaking French and they can't understand anyone! Or maybe in America...

O I love the idea of the Sohma family traveling! Now everyone has to apologize to Kureno for eating chicken.

I love this story.
I wish to see more.