really an awsome story!

this is so amazing!! You must really know a lot about medicine!

Very, very well written. I was reading whitehound's comments about the Britpicks. I think this is a tough one. On the one hand, I could see how a reader from the UK would find all the different terms jarring. On the other hand, readers in America might find it pretty hard to follow with the correct British terminology. So while I generally would rather things read in more British terminology, I think this one would be a harder call.

This was a very original story with excellent pacing. Thanks for posting.

So he or she has worked out who the patient is... Does he or she mean that Dumbledore actually predicted far in advance that Snape would one day be headmaster, so they know he has been following Dumbledore's plan all along?

The year is wrong in this chapter, btw. You correctly had Snape turning up with Draco in June 1997 in the previous chapter, and this should now be January and May 1998, which indeed it was in the books.

Three Britpicks, although one is minute - it should be A&E, not ER; post-mortem, not autopsy; and Public Records Office, not Department of Public Records.

Soon, he or she is going to see that familiar face in the Prophet, the new Headmaster of Hogwarts...

Very good, anyway, very vivid and convincing - but full of Britpicks in the terminology, which is a bit jarring to somebody who used to work for the NHS and was enjoying all the believable medical detail, because it dusrupts my sense of belief.

We don't call them ERs here. A unit which takes both the walking wounded and severe emergencies, like your ERs, is called an A&E (Accident and Emergency). One which takes only severe emergencies is called an ARU (Acute Receiving Unit), and one which takes only the walking wounded is called a Minor Injuries Unit (not, for some reason, an MIU).

We don't call Law Enforcement, either - it's not called that. A Muggle hospital would contact "the police", so St Mungo's would probably contact "the Aurors".

Other minor anomalies - we say "in Derbyshire" not "at Derbyshire". We call unknown male patients "John Smith" not "John Doe" (although we *used* to use John Doe centuries ago, so you can assume the WW is being old-fashioned, since calling Snape "Mr Doe" is too good a pun to miss). And you don't graduate from a high-school here - you just leave or finish school. Graduation is something you only do at a university or college.

Fantastic. Tense, taut, and snappier even than those latex gloves. I am curious -- are you in the field of medicine, or are you perhaps the best researcher in the history of mankind?

I love the coinciding magic and medicine, and the insight into the workings of St. Mungos. One of the things I think JKR could have done better would have been to give us more of the real world aspects of her imagined world, rather than writing a whole lot of soap operas... but that's a rant for another time and place.

I also really like your main character, who's a little bit impatient but, I would like to think, very good-hearted despite it all. I appreciate that you didn't shrink away from anything, since doctors really can't. The little bits and pieces of back- and frontstory (coined a new word, hurrah!) were tantalizing, too.

My only caution is that I think it's rated a little... conservatively? I'm all for as much realism as possible, but I don't know if the site ever gets on anyone's case for that kind of stuff.

So basically you're awesome. :)

Sounds completely authentic.

Ouch - painfully good.

Exceptionally well done. You obviously are well versed in ER procedures as this rings very true. It is also wonderfully fresh and original. Thanks for sharing.