This is a brilliant story so far! Really want to know what happens next. Please update soon :)

this was so amazing! Are you every going to continue it?

oh. suspense suspense. I like your story. Please update soon. :)

aw, i hope jack isnt getting into any truble.

btu i love the way u wrote these chapters =D

plz update soon, id like to see wat happens next. its a great start so far. =D

omg omg omg cant WAIT for more! Update soon plz!

hey!!
great chapter!
keep writing!!
and please update soon!!

really good story but what's bugging him though?

nice start but what's the thing that comes back to haunt Jack?

You're going to end up writing mystery novels, I just know it. You're so good at building the suspense and laying the groundwork for a big reveal. I love that the reader can later go back and find all the clues - things that maybe seemed out of place at the time - and see how everything fits together. And that applies to Keep On Trying, and I'm sure it will apply to this one.

I love the way you write Bobby and Jack. You do so well with both of their POVs and they never feel out of character.

And the humor you've added is just great - the part about Calculus made me LOL.

The suspense is eating away at me! This is amazing, so dramatic, mysterious and suspensful and I love Bobby's harsh concern. You're doing an amazing job! I love it.

Who is this mysterious person/thing/entity that Jack is cavorting with? Lol. For real, though, you are so good with keeping up suspense -- it's driving me nuts trying to come up with some idea here (but in a good way, I promise, lol).

Apart from that, I thought this chapter was great. I love how concerned and determined Bobby is, and I love how all of the brothers interact with Evelyn and with one another. You do a really nice job with characterization. And don't worry about the long gaps in updates -- life gets so busy sometimes and there's no time to stop and smell the roses, lol. It happens to the best of us. :)

Anyway, I'm definitely looking forward to the rest and how this mystery will unfold. I'm on the edge of my seat here, girl! :)

Peace,
Queen Jane

If you are going to continue to be this mysterious, you are going to need to update quickly. Seriously. Or I will come find you and make you take me shopping.

Well done chapter, but you've got me on pins and needles here!

*sqeel* *clap* YAA!!ALRIGHT!!UPDATE SOON AGAIN PELASE!!XD

I really enjoyed this chapter. I like stories that look into the boys childhood.I hope you update soon pretty please?

Love it! Update soon please! I want to find out what's wrong with Jack!