Reviews for If We Were a Movie

Reviews For: If We Were a Movie

WildBubblesRoam 2008-07-30 ch 4,	abuseI'm sorry but I really have to agree with Pinstriped Armani. The Joker is a great character, great villain, and may even make some of us girls squeal with delight but your fanfic really softened him. Maybe it's because you didn't use much detail. I mean...you had him shoot a guy and then just said something like "He was dead." Your writing makes me think you're no older than 14 or 15. I know writing is hard for some people but this is a site where people will read and review your stories. So try to use some more detail. Try to give your stories a little more depth, be a little more accurate, and try to improve on your writing skills. I've spotted at least two or three typos or mis-spellings so you really need to proof read your stuff before you put it on the site. Perhaps find someone who will read your stories and tell you what you need to change/edit BEFORE you put it on the site. Sorry for the negativity of this review. I know you might be hurt by this review, but I think you should hear the truth so that you can get better. I know you've got the potential, everyone does, to be a great writer. So good luck and nice little fanfic, just need to improve a few things.
yatsirch 2008-07-23 ch 1,	abuseDear Pinstriped Armani, A-freakin'-MEN! has briefly had some of her faith in fandom restored
Mynxine 2008-07-22 ch 1,	abuseDUDE. I'm gonna say what I said on a comm, Nolanverse!Joker is the scariest thing since scary was invented, and I can't see why you'd be attracted to him.
Birdiaction 2008-07-18 ch 1,	abuseAlright, I can understand the comments made by Pinstriped Armani, back there. What she said makes sense. But I also think this is your fantasy, and you have the freedom to write it however you want. ^__^ I personally want to marry the joker, but THAT'S kinda impossible. Doesn't stop me from dreaming. But yeah, work on character development. Cute story. :)
Amaya the Winged Fox 2008-07-13 ch 4,	abuse^_^ aww, i just love joker fics. i had this weird dream about him once, and have been a few laughs shy of being obsessed with him ever since =P
Pinstriped Armani 2008-06-01 ch 1,	abuseOkay. Where on earth do I start? Now. You haven't got any character development; your descriptions are slightly odd; quote: "I felt kind of funny..." And am I correct in assuming the fact that you used a HANNAH MONTANA song for the title?...This is BATMAN for heaven's sake! The Joker is a psychopath, a SERIAL killer...he KILLS people...he's INSANE! Lol! And just for your own info; Joker doesn't have brown eyes. If you've seen the previews for the film or read ANY of the comics, you'd notice that his eyes are green. Which leads me to assume you've never read the comics. Further more, Joker is infatuated with BATMAN, not sexually, but psychologically (and maybe a little sexually, if you've read Arkham Asylum). No woman, man or individual could stand in the way of this obsession/fixation. This is his entire focus, and what makes him a dangerous character to Bruce. And how do you fall backwards and land on your wrist? You need more in-depth descriptions...it would help with the overall feel of the story, and help to give it atmosphere. It also lets your readers visualize the scenes that you are writing. Bruce too, is out of character in your fic. He wouldn't care about some random kid, most likely he'd just send her back to wherever she came from. He's seriously got better things to do. So if you intend to continue this story, I'd say remove the 'Erin' character, who is a ridiculous Mary-Sue, and write something about the Joker that involves his true self and darkness. We need more fanfics that explore the depth of this characters psychosis, I'd totally read something like that...I can recommend certain comics that would help you write something like that if you want :) I'm sorry if this review seemed harsh, but I think it needs to be said. This is a website where people ARE going to read your stories, you know that before you post them. Take this as advice; don't use a female main character, I always find that when writing, I tend to put myself into the fic if the lead character is a woman. If you do this too (you do) like me, then I'd say write using an existing male character. Anyway, I'm sorry for the flaming (it was, wasn't it?) I hope this helped you in some minute way rather than purely offending you xD I'd seriously consider writing a Joker fic if I were you... :D
Bella Phantom 2008-04-01 ch 1,	abusePlease write more... Please, wanna see what happens next...

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