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| CSIvHP11 2008-06-08 ch 1, | abuseFUNNY! I love it, it really sounds like something Griss would do:) |
| The Queen of Sin 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuselol we've all fallen victim to Sara's ** over the year lol! |
| WalkerTRngr 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseLMAO! AWESOME! |
| MSCSIFANGSR 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abusegreat story, girl! i loved it! :) chauncey |
| csimouse 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseCute! hehehe |
| jenstog 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abusegoofball! lol yay for becky drabble! |
| Keegan Elizabeth 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseBECKY! Yay! You picked my title suggestion :) Glad I could help! Now, I feel like I need to start playing some Marvin Gaye again! Oh, when I get that feeling... Ok, anyway, I should talk about your fic, right? Since this is a review reply. So anyway...I love Grissom staring at Sara's **! I dont know why, but it's bloody brilliant (did I just sound British, eh??) I love it! The whole fic idea was just too cute and like...seriously grin-worthy! btw I love that you also said that Grissom made a "beeline" to his office...just because you know...bees and GSR... although he's making a beeline away from Sara in this fic...but it's only a matter of time that the bees will bring 'em back together, right? lmao... er, i have a headache. So that's why I dont make sense. Back to beta-ing, Lol...I'll be annoying and say that you dont need the comma after "she would stop, to..." and then take out the word 'to' in the last paragraph where it says "downwards to at the..." Ok...enough rambling! Hope this helps your writer's block! |