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| Whirlwind421 2008-07-02 ch 4,  | abuseAwesomeness!! You're a good writer!! |
| Cocoa Girl2 2008-03-28 ch 4, | abuseWonderful story. Wish something like this could happen on the show. Hope to read more John/Elizabeth stories from you soon. |
| TubaPrincess 2008-03-25 ch 4, | abuseAww... one of the best stories ever! I love the idea that you have that explains why Liz was gone so long. Too bad the writers can't bring her back. |
| queerofatlantis 2008-03-22 ch 4, | abusebrilliant story! cant wait for the next part |
| JenniDinoRobot 2008-03-21 ch 4, | abuseAw super cute! What spoilers did you read? I'm curious now! Great job, btw. |
| sparklyshimmer2010 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseIm sorry to say im not reading this (i will eventually im just avoiding spoilers at the moment) i was just wondering if you think this would be a good add to my community (which im now adding anything for season 5 to) |
| Anon 2008-03-21 ch 2, anon. | abuseI like your writing. I liked how you started the story, everyones dialog sounded very real. One thing I thought coupld use a little work on, is when John and Elizabeth hug. Maybe not bring up the Siege hug, although I understand you are trying to give us a point of reference. I like the second chapter the best. Great dialogs, and the story build up is nicely done. I found a couple of typos, so I am going to include them here. Chapter 1: It should read "fire in the hole" Chapter 2: a) "Once I was sure ..." b) "I was searching theirs ... " Please continue with the story, you have a great start! |
| Cocoa Girl2 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseI like it. This is a wonderful start. Can't wait to read the rest of the story. |
| Eris 2008-03-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseMay I make a suggestion? I think that if Woolsey keeps objecting to Elizabeth, then John (or Rodney, or better yet, both of them!) should throw it back in Woolsey's face that if it hadn't been for the IOA insisting on giving the go-ahead to the first strike against the Replicators that forced the Replicators to attack Atlantis, then Elizabeth would never have been injured, and Rodney would never have had to turn the nanites back on and make her half-Replicator to save her life. So it's Woolsey's fault (along with the rest of the IOA) that Elizabeth's there like that in the first place. He should be asking her for forgiveness for causing her near-death and wrecking the rest of her life. |
| Whirlwind421 2008-03-20 ch 1, | abuseGreat story!! |