Reviews for Mykonos to Goa

Reviews For: Mykonos to Goa

bellerbee 2008-07-02 ch 12,	abuseA very skillful and beautifully written story. You kept it between the lines of the two movies very stringently, and that created some challenges and some opportunities for you to show off your creativity and emotional astuteness. You filled in detail around large and small movie events very vibrantly. The presence of the child so bittersweet. I love your structure: one chapter belongs to Jason, and the next is Marie's point of view. Nice.
Badr 2008-05-24 ch 9,	abuseI'm wondering--do you speak German? You do a good job with it, but the commands Marie uses when speaking to Drachen; you use the Sie form, the formal imperative, when someone speaking to a family member (especially a mother to her child) would use the informal imperative, the du form. So instead of "Laufen Sie zum Auto" it would be "Lauf zum Auto"; instead of "Gehen Sie mit Schwester Angela," it would be "Geh mit.." (although I think perhaps you should double-check that last one, my German is only basic). Very good story, otherwise.
Moon Called 2008-04-29 ch 3,	abuseEk! I'll have to come back to your wonderful story after I've finished mine. LOL!! I don't want Nicky's baby to look like Marie's! :) It's a shame, too, because I'd settled in for a good read. This (the first three installments) is well written.
adlervan 2008-04-08 ch 12,	abuseSad and lovely... I wish there'd been some way they could've kept the child and the story then taken an AU route to see how that sort of life could've worked out. As much as I could see Jason willing to give up his child, I could also see him refusing to do so and finding a way for them to be together. As it was, I had a real hard time believing he'd make Marie part with their child, make her choose him over their child. I could believe instead him slipping off into the night and disappearing, forcing Marie to stay with Drachen without him and without the danger he poses. Perhaps pop up again here and there in their lives, but never make Marie leave Drachen. He'd sacrifice himself before removing his own child from her parents. I liked seeing how Marie and Jason ended up with that photo of themselves together. Overall I thought it was written outstandingly and very emotionally, and I look forward to your future efforts. Also, one little picky thing, and it may contradict info you've found elsewhere, but I don't think anyone would put Neosporin on a new tattoo to keep it from being infected. I have 4 tattoos and all I've ever been told is to wash a fresh one with soap and water 2-3 times a day and then put a light, non-perfumed moisturizer on it.
Tigeress-10 2008-03-28 ch 6,	abuseAnother lovely chapter. Your montage of family life is very sweet and enjoyable to read. Can't wait to read more. One thing--I got three alerts that this chapter had been uploaded, all within a minute of each other. Are you editing/reuploading them? (Same happened for chapter five.)
adlervan 2008-03-26 ch 1,	abusei wanted to send you a private message but i think you need to enable that on your account before i can. thanks!
adlervan 2008-03-25 ch 5,	abuseWonderful! Well written, avoids being sappy (which i find a lot of "they're having a baby" stories to be), a nice level of angst to keep it from being too lovey-dovey. I liked that Jason insisted the baby get a birth certificate - it occurred to me later why he'd want that, and you didn't overplay the point. Looking forward to reading more!
Tigeress-10 2008-03-22 ch 5,	abuseOh, wow. It's intresting to read this--I've only seen two stories in which Jason had children, and they were both with Nikki. I know he eventually has kids with Maie in the books; but the books and movies are pretty much unrelated and their situation is very different then. You've done a lovely job of writing, too, and handling the extreme difficulty a child arises. Great job. =) Looking forward to more.

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