You managed to capture Fai's perspective quite well. Props to you on that. Great job.

Corrections:

"It had been like this for days, but he’d been able to put on the mask like always and bare it." Shouldn't bare be bear?

"His body was screaming for it’s source of life." Its.

"I have so little control over myself when I’m my vampiric senses take over--I couldn’t possibly stop myself if it was called for." I believe I'm should be omitted.

That was really cute and very close to what I was looking for. Very good job on writing it. I say a four and a half out of five. ^^

cute♥! that was really great...ah, this should REALLY happen...damn you CLAMP!^^
"I thought that we were past this."
♥ you really hit the tension between them
*add to faves*

Well that was simple but cute, and very imaginable in the story

O your insight into vampiric needs and such makes me wonder...are you? lol j/k! Fai's need to stay out of the way was well written here. You didn't make him seem like a whiney bitch but you didn't make him seem like he was faking it. Good job on balancing on that fine line. And our dear Kuro being protective -cough-possessive-cough- over Fai, too sweet. Didn't make him a push over-softy and you didn't make him tougher than leather. Your characters had harmony between them that is hard to come by. Plus...call me sick but the feeding was well decribed (HOT HOT HOT!)...what can I say? I have a thing for vampires!

Love,
RIn

AW! I really need to finish reading the manga, though, I do know the whole story. :)

Hah, I really like stories where Fai doesn't want to feed and Kurogane's berating him for it x3 this was very good. I like that Fai eventually came to Kuro-tan himself and the tension between them. ^^ Please write more :3

naw, thats so cute! hehe, ooh! love, love, love!

That was a good fic.
It is so kind of Kurogane to give Fai his blood!
Have a good day!

Just beautiful! I liked it and it would be much more amusing if there was a sequal or a whole story behind this one.

That was absolutly adorable, despite the serious undertones. I love it!