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| lithium17 2008-06-07 ch 1,  | abusewonderful :) |
| Goblet-of-fire-gal 2008-03-26 ch 1, | abuseThat was an amazing story! I really enjoyed it! One of the best I've read in a while. You did an amazing job of making everything seem real. Good Job. GOF-Gal |
| mentarisenja 2008-03-24 ch 1, | abusei like the repetition, it's redundant, but it was great ! |
| Martin Baker 2008-03-23 ch 1, | abuseI loved this! It was brilliant! You said in a one-shot what some people take chapters and chapters to convey. Keep writing! |
| iluvlilyndjames 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abusegood job. i liked it it a lot. it reminded me of a sarah dessen book, or, rather, her writing. |
| chocolateriku 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseI must say that this truely almost made me cry. I love the feelings of panic and relief that you get from the repeated lines. Very well done. |
| inadaze22 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseThat was nice. I really liked it. |
| Sumhope 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseWonderful! I also hate it when Ron is written and mean and hateful (thats malfoy's job lol) and Pansy is written as a gold digging **. I thought Ron was very sweet to Hermione and it was very realistic. |
| saige 2008-03-21 ch 1, anon. | abuseThat was heartbreakingly beautiful. The structure was great, and the use of run ons to convey thoughts was very effective. I hope you write more D/Hr in the future! |
| red-v0dka 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, just beautiful. I loved the way this was written and the way you structured it. I loved Ron in this and his speech, "I wouldn’t let you go if I wasn’t sure he would love you more than the world"... Absolutely beautiful. |
| Celtic Wish 2008-03-21 ch 1, | abuseI really, really like this fic. Normally I don't like fics that run-on like that, because normally it means that the person has poor grammar, but in this fic it gives the story something that it would lack if you used proper grammar. It conveys the utter panic and, at the end, utter relief, that Draco is feeling. I did notice that you did use proper grammar in spots where you weren't trying to convey his feelings, and I think that's why it works for you. All in all, good job. |