this beautiful. i love rin/haru. and i love the symbolism here.

I like the beginning, maybe put some shorter lines in here to build the emotion. Try not to repeat words but I love the emotion between the two of them. Aww, the end is so sad.

Great work, and yes I do love this couple to death

myst

Ooh, very nice! I really liked the symbolism, and the way you described their relationship.

Kyota