that was a great story1 i listen to the song while reading it and I'm glad that you put the last scene in it cause the song didn't really have a ending o it. I really love how you wrote the story ^^.

That was the sweetest things I've ever read. I love the ending, and I love how you showed important events through their life. Great job :)

I love this :) its really sweet :)

Awesome story! I love that song and you did really well making it into a story!

Aaw, cute story about how Ash and Misty met as kids (and eventually fall in love). The idea of them meeting during a fateful fishing trip was adorable! The streams of flashbacks were particularly well incorporated in this fic, linked together via the theme of what Ash’s life may become if Misty was ever taken away from him. True, futuristic AAMR ideas regarding dates/marriage/kids/etc. have been done countless times in the fandom, but I think this particular story incorporated them well. The songfic elements were also pretty appropriate, and I didn’t mind them (considering I normally dislike songfics). I do kinda’ wish the story was longer, but as it stands this is another sweet Pokeshippy fic of yours.

I LOVE the song. It always brings a tear to my eye as did your story near the end! Happy tears though. Happy tears. :) Very cute fic. You fit Ash and Misty into the story that the song tells very well and made it your own. *Maura*

Very cute story Tohsaka! I was so worried when Misty almost died, but was so relieved to see you didn't leave it open-ended like that. Nice job and keep up the good work!

Good job!
i like this~

Another great fic! =D I'm glad there's an author who consistently delivers awesome fics!

This fic was, in my opinion, very quick. Everything went by pretty quick. Sadly, I felt like the "getting mugged" and the "water breaking" scenes were somewhat fillers, but the mugged scene was pretty good, seeing as it filled me with a feeling that something might happen. I also liked the scene with Misty actually giving birth to the baby, since I was scared that Misty might not make it back. I felt warm and fuzzy with the scenes of little Ash and little Misty, especially when Misty was puffy-eyed and asked if she could go fishing, and Ash said yeah. That was definitely my favorite scene! I also really enjoyed reading the last line, as it referred to what was talked about at the beginning of the fic.

All in all, I'd give this fic a B+ for really good enjoyment, as well as filling me with a plethora of emotions as I read it. Nice job!

Writing: A Passion of the Soul

aw I liked it. Ash is so cute. I love how Ash's dad so wisely knew he'd change his mind about Misty. I like the transitions as well. It kept me on my toes, but it was still easy to follow.

Wow. I am going to be completely honest. I didn't espect much. But this was amazing. I loved the writing, and the way it was compiled. I liked how you more based it on the song than making it a song-fic. It was apsolutely perfect. I love it!

Beautiful, just beautiful, Kati-chan. ;] I took the time to read it, even though I had homework to do and it's kinda late here, but it was worth it. I'm glad to know you're updating more often. That's good news for us readers. I now have something to look forward to. And I'm glad to see your writing has improved and Kitten Kisses has pointed out most of the mistakes I saw, so that's all cleared up. The end was the best.

'Oh, Misty. You have no idea how much I wanted you to come fishing with us today.' He thought, and he began to row.

Perfect! Totally sums up the theme. The writing, flawless. The theme, touching. I loved every bit of it. And for something to be written in one day...wow, just wow. I don't know what else to say...but keep updating more!! :D

Stephy-chan

THAT was BEAUTIFULL!
*cries*

Hello, it's nice to see 'fic from you so soon!

[However, he paused mid-stride; looking back over his should at his son. Winking, he said,

"You never know, son. Someday you'll change your mind. Someday you might really want Misty to come fishing with you."]

Incorrect semi-colon use. ^^ A semi-colon separates two complete sentences, and since "Looking back over his should at his son" isn't a complete sentence and can't stand alone, a comma is what should be there.

"Should" should be "shoulder".

And after "winking, he said," the dialogue should follow immediately after instead of on the next line. (I think that was just a formatting error, though, and unintentional on your part. ^^)

[She is loosing too much]

Losing, rather than loosing. :)

The only other nitpick I've got is where Ash is in the chapel of the church. I think that using lines that were so close to the lines in the song was a bit much. Mostly because I can't imagine Ash saying anything quite like, "take the heart from my chest". Maybe a simple, "Take me instead." would have been more Ash-like. Eh?

Now you mentioned that you weren't sure about that last little scene in there...but I really liked it. Especially the last line, where Ash thinks about how much he wanted her to come fishing with him that day. That, my friend, was pure genius. (And thankfully, you didn't leave the ending open like the song!)

The song is corny as heck, but it's good. I mean, it sounds more like a song that would take place in ...maybe the 1980s, but that last verse is just killer!

I'm glad to see that other people can appreciate country songs, though. =)

Cheers,
-Manna

PS. I remember you suggested that I check out that LJ community, and I did. I'll have to make an attempt to write something for the Pokemon section again, but I'm not particularly inspired to do so... It could be fun, though! (And I have about 20 ideas that are already based on songs written down, haha, but...eh. Maybe I'll give it a go, maybe not. :D)

Now this was nice to read.

Going from the past and trough the tough times that life would give those two. But still having the continuation about what happened when they were young. That's a young guy for you, being so tough on not having her come, but when her eyes are puffed up he's there for her.

Certainly got worried a few times. Like when they were being held up like that or during the complications following child birth. Just glad Misty made it out alright.

Just enjoyed reading it, is all I can say.