Wow! Good going here! Update soon okay? :3

i really really like how you write. and i like how these drabbles are short and sweet. or, i guess not so sweet for the second one, but still really enjoyable to read. i hope you update soon, but no rush.

-giggles-
Pauper has just tickled my fancy.
It's quite adorable, really, how Neji turns Tenten's words back on her like that.
It also seems just like Tenten to have a weapon hiding somewhere, even (or especially?) when posing as royalty.
Good job. (=

Found your story through the Nejiten LJ community. I love these one shots! And I love your style of writing. Can't wait to see you update. :)

That was cute!
I believe this, in all your description of the Team and their differences, coupled with the ending,

"Hyuuga Neji did not appear to be one of sentimentality.

But, well, he was."

...was downright beautiful!
I'm definitely looking forward to more 'vignettes'. :)

-attempts to fave multiple times in all her ecstasy-

You're right, it was different but not in a bad way. It's always good to try out new styles. I like what you dealt with in this one - it's very believable and I think you chose well when you used her eyes as the channel. You also portrayed Neji's confusion and Tenten's cluelessness very well.
I must say though that the last line doesn't seem to fit, it appears as though something's missing in between the second to last line and the final one. Overall good job!

This little fanfic is one of the shortest ones I've read, but it's also one of the best.

I love the vocabulary you use. It shows how much you've mastered the English language, and it also shows how good of a writer you are, to have used them so wisely.

You didn't use to much dialogue, though, which is the one thing I'm a bit torn about. On one hand, Neji isn't much of a talker, so it was probably for the best. On the other, a little more dialogue could added a bit more... sha-ZAM!

...Yeah, I'll never attempt to use sound effects again...

You kept the characters in-character, even though you were looking at Neji from a different and uncommon perspective. Pat yourself on the back, since most people (most likely including myself) would have abandoned the thought of TRYING to do that.

The bond that Tenten and Neji share is distinctly shown, despite its length. Feel pleased, and know that you have the right to boast about how good your writing is.

Love and Scribbles,
Ruffle

Aw I liked it it was really sweet ^^ Good job

I like your choice of vocabulary: cadence, mosey, padding. Subtle and clean, pretty in places but sufficiently interspersed with more simple, unembellished sentences to prevent the style from becoming overly cluttered and pretentious.

Perhaps you could try to cut down on the one-liners and expand your paragraphs. (I'm looking specifically at the section between "Consequently, their..." and "...just beyond the small shop window.") I wrote like that when I first started out and with more practice you learn to pad out the lines so as to make it less abrupt and jumpy.

Aww, that ending was adorable. Really, I loved it.
The beginning did seem to ramble just a bit but I understand why - it's necessary to explain the point of the story. Don't worry - it makes sense. I really like your choice of item - a picture frame (for memories!). Really good.
Ooh, mosey - good word!
Oh, and thanks for telling me - I did not realize it was you.