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| AnGeLGIrL156 2008-06-22 ch 21, | abusewow thats so cool ! update soon ! |
| jack 2008-06-15 ch 21, anon. | abuseI think it was brilliant your a natural! |
| Ninja hand 2008-05-02 ch 1, | abusejust to let all you guys know iam writing a sequal no more chapters, so keep your eyes out for 'When blades meet' cheers catcha all later. |
| Uchiha Yumi 101 2008-05-01 ch 21, anon. | abuseI think that this is a brilliant story and is very well written. Please get the next chapter out as soon as you can |
| Azar's Curse 2008-03-24 ch 11, | abuseHello, I finally got round to reading this. You have a good story line going here, and it seems very organised. There are three things that I saw though: 1. There is a lot of unnecessary detail, which slows the story down, and also bores the reader slightly. 2. There is a lot of repetition, especially with the word 'and'. 3. I've lived in Japan, and some of the reactions aren't really realistic for their culture. I hope this helps you, and that you continue to write this story, Curse of Azar |