 Tiamat42 2008-03-31 . chapter 5Nice to see you back in business, here and on DeviantArt. :) I do hope, once you clear all the, ahem, fluff from your brain you _will_ work on your longer story. Please? Pretty please? Pretty-please with Escad shaped sprinkles on top? (If that doesn't work, nothing will...)
I always find it hard to say much about couple-paragraph oneshots, (except perhaps 'aww') but they're cute. Fluff is fun, as always. Your writing is great, the imagery is good, I just would really like them to be connected and drawn into the larger story...reading this is like watching a trailer for a movie, I just want to see the whole thing!
Don't stick all the good fluffy bits in here! Save some for the real story! Otherwise it'll be like...you know, the trailers where you laugh hysterically, but then when you see the movie you realize they told all the jokes in the preview. ;)
That said...I think my favourite is number four, Family. Possibly that makes me an old stick in the mud, but hey, that's the one I liked best. :D |