This was good but needs to be worked on more; it went by too quickly. Keep the ending however, it was perfect. I love how stories capture the title in the ending. It just leaves you wanting more and stunned without anything to complain about. But of course the whole story has to be good. Once this is worked on it will be.

Sorry...didn't think it worked. Jack and Lizzie would never be so ** Will and just leave a note. Also think that after a beautiful and descriptive start everything fell apart with all of your descriptions just taking a short sentence. It all needs expanding...LOTS!

Lizzie would never just come out with a decision to drop Will and run off with Jack in the space of 2 sentences. Everything seemed to speed up and lose all description the further you got into your story.

aw that was so sweet it was perfect. there definitly should be more to this story.

aw that was cute, good ending, i liked it all together great work :)

a very good storie

short sweet and to the point.

you could write more to this, it could be a series.

Cheers
AJ