|Reviews for Another Chance|
| Valisilwen 2/16/10 . chapter 1
Very sweet. It made me smile.
| freak4jesus 8/14/08 . chapter 1
very well done but I caught a couple of errors:
1)"When I've heard one very heated fight between you and your father"
a better way to say it would probably be
"Then I heard one very heated fight between you and your father"
2)"That's what you have been arguing with your father that night when I left."
"That's what you had been arguing with your father that night when I left."
I know, small mistakes but I've been taken to town by way harsher people for smaller
| Cupcake Heart 5/1/08 . chapter 1
Rizdaer's romance was really sweet, wasn't it?
I really like how you got his viewpoint and feelings across!
| Dangerously Incompetent 3/25/08 . chapter 1
That was really sweet, Neferit. I love Domi's IWD2 Project, and you've done it justice, I think. I've never played the Rizdear romance, but after reading it, I think I might. There were a few mistakes, which stupidly, I didn't think to document, but other than those, the story was perfect.
It's so nice to see the Icewindale section start to blossom! Good job.
One thing I do remember - "Looking on your face was pleasant way how to start a day." should be "Looking at your face was a pleasant way to start the day." or "Looking down on your face was a pleasant way to start the day."