It is amazing how this author really gets into the mind of Edmund Pevensie!
A very good bit of literature!
Keep up the good work!

This. Was. Great! So perfect. Please don't kill me because of my name! I HATE Mary Sues.

A very good job - the differences between the two growing-ups are shown very well. Just the right mix of humour and seriousness.

This was very good. You really pulled off the combination of humor and seriousness extremely well. Stories focusing on Susan usually depress me, but this one left me feeling hopeful. Great job. :)

This really was the perfect Susan story. It dealt with the issue seriously enough to convey the true impact of it, but kept it lighthearted enough not to become so weighed down like most Susan fics. I think that Edmund's POV offers a fresh perspective. If I was to quote all the areas I loved about the story, I would basically repost the whole thing, so I'll just pick my favorites.

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I must admit that Susan’s hair is positively annoying, especially her lady’s maid is somehow absent and yours truly is roped into brushing the tangled mass one-hundred times. I’d rather fight an ogre any day.
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Oh, Ed, why am I not surprised? An ogre must be an easy fight compared to Susan's long locks. Actually, judging by how tangled my hair can sometimes get within a day, it probably is an easier fight.

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It’s not like I’d ever try one of their dresses on!
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*laugh* Sounds to me like someone's getting pretty defensive.

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Mum had no idea that Peter the Magnificent, High King of Narnia, would go to bed when he pleased
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While this line is incredibly funny, it just shows how difficult the change back to England was.

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I hesitate to call Susan a lady anymore. Not just because she would bite my head off and tell me to stop playing games, but because she no longer deserves the title. We’ve all changed since returning from Narnia, but Peter, Lucy and I have not forsaken ourselves or Aslan. I know that Susan will come back to us one day. After all, once a king or queen of Narnia, always a king or queen. That’s got to be true, even here.
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So sad, but hopeful at the same time. it's really the essence of Susan's struggle in England, I think.

Well, now that I've written a review longer than some stories, I will just once again say I loved it.

I think it was absolutly hilarious and you did a wonderful job portraying her through Edmund

interesting story! what's up with peter?
please update soon!

Very good! Again, I enjoyed the voice you gave Edmund, relating what was happening with his siblings, particularly Susan. He was more serious in his commentary this time, but still tickled my funny bone once in while -- such as calling the encounter with the hag and Nikabrik "lovely." Good job showing the different emotions he felt regarding Susan, from sad to disappointed and annoyed (especially with her friends and beaus).

This passage really stood out for me:

When we returned to Narnia to help Caspian, I knew we were all silently hoping that perhaps we could stay and grow up here. And I’m sure all of us entertained the thought of resuming our rule. A second Golden Age for Narnia, perhaps? Maybe then Susan would have stayed a true Narnian. Yet like many dreams, this one died hard, and we were returned to our own, grimy world.

Wonderful job done!

This is very good. It even sounds just like the charaters of Edmund and susan. You must really understand the books well. I just hate it when some dummy who hasn't read the books rights a story about narnia but you don't seem to have that problem. the story runs smoothly and is a joy to read
thank you

Cute story. Well written, no unnessary charater bashing...I'll give it a 4 out of 5

Wow.

I really liked the second chapter. I think I might like the second one the best. As before, Edmund is very entertaining to 'listen' too. His commentary is quite brilliant. I really like the way you explain it all. Why Susan is they way she is. How she does remember she just doesn't want to talk about it. I really like the small things that tells that she haven't forgotten like the archery and her paintings. I also like how Peter makes her feel safe and how Ed grumbles that it was *he* that got her out of Tashbaan. (Really wasn't it Tumnus idea?) Also Ed's faith that Susan the Gentle is in there somewhere and one day she will come back.

This story is really good. It explains everything in a well put manner. It's funny, but summed up well. You say a lot in such few words. I love it! Well done!

I really do like it. It's differant than the first chapter, but then so is england. one thing i wanted to point out was in the sentence, "...the lack of swords annoyed me and Peter." That should be Peter and me. I like the last paragraph, it ends on a hopeful note.

Lovely, lovely. Wonderful job. I loved how you protrayed Edward, not to mention everyone else in the story. It's a great interpretation of Susan's change after Narnia.

Again, wonderful job :D

my goodness was that lovely! You got everyone spot on and its quite moving how you make it clear that Edmund wants the old relationship back . quite lovely.