Dear DobbElfLord,

After your extended absence, I am beginning to think your daughters may have taken exception to the "I want my boobs back" comment followed by your proclamation of having an experience of raising said daughters and barred you from writing any more fics. Could you please, please, please allay my fears and at least tell us that you would be posting again - that you have not been banned from writing?

Waiting with a pounding heart,

- Anon

another brill fic! (o: i'm really enthused about this continuation, and i love the direction it's headed. once again, kudos for the brill overlapping of the two universes, canon and yours, it's absolutely seamless. i esp adore luna; i think her characterisation is spot-on. another fic that deals w a brill luna is 'desperate measures' by vvc, and she writes a smashing story, if you like that sort of thing (o: other than that her fic has nothing to do w yours, but it really is a bloody fantastic read as well.

i'm really perked to see where the whole demon thing is headed...another great fic involving demons is miranda flairgold's 'a second chance of life'...and i really should stop randomly throwing out fics here. lol (o: but i'm really glad i'm seeing things i've never seen before in other fics, esp grindel-dirk; his existence really came out of nowhere on the left. i'm really eager to see how this fic turns out! (o: cheers!

Thank Merlin she had no leanings to the Dark.

^woah..

Ok i Read everything up to chapter 17, and i think this book is awsome up to now. Even the prsquell was awsome. If you want suggestions, even if you don't know how to continue the story with another book right now leave the story open ended enough for room.
Another thing I think you should focus on is snape, I think you need to explain further on how about his background And why he is staying at Hogwards even tho he could be a master potions maker.

hi there, i think your stories are awesome! it's amazing how you maintain an action-packed plot with few noticeable loopholes, despite the humongous number of characters and their complicated relationships. also, thanks for sharing your creativity and humour with us; i greatly enjoyed most of the prank wars and how most of them kept the plot moving along nicely.

Nice work, I am done with professor potter. And so far I like it.

Hi I have read both the first part ( altered destenies) and this up to " oh bugger" i think you are doing an awsome job with this story and you should definitly continue. I have had a lot of fun reading altered destinies. And I like how you have started this sequel. If you can I think you should continue this and leave the balanced destenies sequel open ended too so that you can continue writting the stories at least until Harry is considerably old. : )

I have to say aside from some spelling mistakes your way of writting is very close to J.K.
I even think that the humor you put into it is better.

Keep at it and I will definitly keep reading.

Bitpower

Took a long time to get to this chapter, but it's been so long I decided to reread AD and BD up to this point, and it's still just as amazing as I remember. I'm happy that everything is turning out all right, though I would have loved it if Derek had caught that little 'Defense 101' jab. I would also love it if Bobby met all the twins...oh, the chaos. Hilarious.

Awesome chapter, and a lot of action on the horizon. I hope the next chapter isn't too long in coming!

Ciao,
~Kybo

REALLY AWESOME> UPdatE!

Great chapter! hell to hole story is great! can't wait for the next one!

Character deaths sure ruin a story.

THIs is great but i dont like how you made snape the criminal because in harry potter and the deadly hollows thats not how it was and i really felt sorry for snape.

I just had a thought occur to me:

What happened with Hagrid? Since he was never accused of opening the Chamber of Secrets in this timeline, he most certainly completed his schooling at Hogwarts. So where is he now?

Really nice fics. Your stories are a tribute to HP fans' imaginations. I hope you keep updating!

Wow!

I love it... you created the characteres in a great way... they are all very multi-layered but they are all consistend, and I just love them.
I never thought that Serena would be the sister that was really on the side of Grindelwald... when I think about it, then she probably wasn't... just wanted the knowledge.
And that Christina is Hermione's Grandma is just a brilliant idea! I would have never guessed it! I love suprises like this, keeps the readers on their toes! (I somehow hear a voice in the back of my head calling for "CONSTANT VIGILANCE"... I don't know why...)
So my overall comment to this story is: I love it!

Now to the part of consructive criticism:
First of all, during Harry's fight against the demon you say he fought the first demon in Dresden, but it was Hamburg.
Second thing... you sometimes have certain words double in your sentences. You should probably reread it to delete the spare words. Or, if you wanted them there as a rhetorical emphasis, then you should use some commas or something to indicate that it isn't a mistake, but has a purpose.
You also should find a way to better mark what is thought and what is said within the text, this also includes the parseltounge speaking, it would make it easier for the reader to follow your story. (I admit it was rater late when I was reading your story and for some paragraphes I needed a lot of concentration to be able to understand about what you were talking.)
Besides these two points I really enjoy your writing style.

By the way this comment also ties to Altered Destinies, as it was 2:30 the day before yesterday morning when I finished reading it and I was in no condition to write an adequate comment to the story.

SO what I loved about AD: To be true I liked the view you took of WW II ... it was iteresting to see it from an outside view... as I only know it from the German side of the war. OK in school we heared the facts of what happened when, but the stories my grandfathers told me are much more real in my mind, then any facts from any books. Your story gave me some hints what I looked like for somebody not beeing German, and I think you gave an unbiased view and for that I congratulate you (probably the wrong word, but I don't find any better word... difficult to say what I mean.).

Back to the story and out of the history: I loved your interpretation of the Roman clerics to be wizards in disguise... they sometimes really look funny.
What else... a yes, the parts of your spoken German where really funny as well as the French...I like it when authors try to use different languages. But there was one longer passage and I thought that it might be difficult for native english speaker to understand it, as you didn't provide a translation.

I think I covered all the points I wanted to metion...
No... one last thing you misspelled Zabini as Zambini. I don't know where it comes from but I have seen it in different fanfictions before. Is it possible that there were different spellings in the UK and US version? I know of some stroyline differences, but I thought the names where consistant...
Probably I have to get one of the early US versions, as I already have the UK and German versions... just to check for the names.

So now I should have covered all the mayor points that caught my eye. I hope to read more soon and send you my best regards from Germany.

Bye
Sanchan