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Reviews For: The Diary of Football, Love, and University

Rose Crest
2008-03-31
ch 1,
abuseI didn't get a chance to read the whole story, but i really enjoyed it. I haven't seen Bend it like Beckham in a long time but this really helped me recap what happend. I really like the part were Jules and Jess met Rosie i just thought that it was really realistic. I think you chose a good topic to continue writing and i really really enjoyed reading it.
Crystalkei
2008-03-26
ch 1,
abusei like the idea of a journal to portray your story.

There's a couple of times where you used "where" when you should have used "were."

Hope to see more. If you need any proofing help, let me know. ;)
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