Hi, i umm... i wanna say that i really really love this fic. Definitely one of my favourite AR fics out there... Sarov is my favourite villian of the series and I love that you explored this alternate future.

And uh also i kinda want to ask... i hope you won't mind it, but this fic has given me some ideas of my own about AUs where Sarov wins... i want to write an Alex/Yassen slash version. Hope you don't mind?

Taken down? Are you kidding me? This needs to have a 20 chaptered sequel or something.
I really got sucked in. When I was reading the book I kept thinking what'd REALLY happen if the General made Alex his son. I'd really love you to continue a bit, just to see what you think would happen next.
This is written really well too... I loved how you ended it.
GAH! I just love it. Just DO something... anything. If you did another chapter just saying 'and they all died and everyone lived happily ever after' that would be wicked XD

Wow, I totally loved this story and would have liked to see it continued but I guess one-shot has it's perks too.

Too bad there are no evil-Alex stories that doesn't include slash... *sighs*

As I said, brilliant one-shot.

Pretty good, and if you wanted to, a nice chance could be offered for a two-shot...though it would be a little awkward. However, I applaud :)...virtually to you of course
Moony

Totally worth it! This was *gorgeous*. Could it be continued, maybe?

Awesome. Brilliantly done

I don't think I've reviewed before, so here we go:

I *love* this. It's so sad, and haunting, and good. I love how, over time, Alex loses that rebellious streak that makes him sign "Alex Rider." it's gradual, not too sudden ... It's really good.

the scene with Blunt and Byrne was in past tense, while the rest was in present. That's pretty much my only major qualm with this - the tense switch. But it was only for that one scene, and then you switched back to present. Personally, I like it more in present.

"The next time he's asked to sign something, he writes Alex Sarov." - Awesome ending. Like I said, I love how he gradually breaks down - from being Alex Rider, to calling Sarov "father" in Russian, to finally signing 'Alex Sarov.' The ending line ended it with this sad, haunting feeling, at least for me. Poor Alex.

I also like how you don't over-describe Alex's whipping, but you do manage to make us feel sorry for him. And he's so in character there, the way he tries to hold it together and doesn't just go to pieces.

"He can feel them both, and wonders, vaguely, if there is blood soaking his t-shirt. Or if his shirt has simply been destroyed." I didn't like the flow of these parts. I think it might sound better as:
"He can feel them both, and wonders, vaguely, if there is blood soaking his t-shirt or if it has simply been destroyed." I think it sounds better combined into one sentence.

"He both wishes that the General will hurry up, or decide he is finished." I think this would sound better as:
"He wishes that the General will either hurry up, or decide he is finished." The 'both' doesn't really fit.

"When it’s over, he stays hunched over." You used 'over' twice, and that really bugs me. Maybe substitute the first 'over' for 'through,' or 'done,' or some such.

"That's going to be a pain to clean up ..." I love this, simply because in some odd, twisted way, it's so Alex. For some reason, considering his circumstances, I can really see him saying this - even if it's just the first thing to mind.

Okay. This review is way, way too long. Just know that, apart from the stuff I pointed out above, I really love this piece. Thanks for writing,
Ashe

Wow, this story is amazing! i love it! in a sort of twisted way. i just wish Alex had been able to get out of it. very scary!

Wow. That is really just a 'wow' fic...I really really want to know more, but sometimes it's best to let the reader imagine more...Agh. Now I've tempted myself with thinking of more Alex...For sooth, I should be stonger! But he's so yummy even when he's being 'emo'...

Oh well, back to my fantasies of Alex and others. See you there, if you're lucky...

Maybe a little revamping, but definitely worth continuing. There are no other stories like this, and it would be a shame to not see a story with such potential elaborated on.

Very gripping. Right up until the end I was hoping for a happy ending, and yet...

Really, wonderful job. Though I find it a little difficult to see Alex just giving in, I do think shooting Yassen would be the final straw. Thanks for the good read; I look forward to more from you in the future!
--Tsurai

good job.

interesting concept, what would happen if sarov had won. very interesting. but well written. i like it. in other words, well done on a very good fic

dark but good

it was...nice, but i think you should finish the Cunning Hand first