*starts to laugh* This is really funny, keep it up!

this is awesome. definitely reading the second chapter for sure.

This is very well written. You can really set up each scene in your head, and see every detail. It's also a comparatively original story. I like it, and look forward to more.

This is awesome.

I think this is a great fanfiction and has been Bookmarked, also I cant remember how many times I have read this.

Nice few more chapters and a little longer chapters.
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This is a good story. As soon as I log in, it's getting favorited.

Whatever happened, did you dissapear off the face of the earth? I hope not because i love this story and only you can finish it in a way that i will continue to love.

Very good so far. So little fanfiction is of high quality these days. You give good development to the Big Daddy/Little Sister relationship, and Jack seems believable, except he seems a little nonchalant about Fontaine, concidering he, you know, stabbed him in the back not to long ago.

alright, ive been playing bioshock at a friends house for a while, and then just two days later i actually got it and uh...i fucking love it, i think you captured the personality of the big daddy perfectly and then the personality of the character, Jack, i think pretty well, all i gotta say is youve got some skill on making this man, write on, cuz this shits like crack i like it!

Nice! I got tired of Bioshock, since it gets a little samey after you play it non-stop for a month. And then there's the fact that I may have sacrificed more than 2 little sisters and wrecked the good ending... And the fact that eventually weapons like the machine gun become useless against spilicers with a tonne of health.

This makes me quite happy. Big Daddies and Little Sisters in general just have very interesting relationships with their Daddies. It's always very interesting, to see what happens when you go ahead and really just... explore, y'know? Although I'm kind of confused. How does a throw object make a dent in a huge metal freakin' helmet like... thirty times the size of his head? Seriously, if it was a 2 inch dent, the man would barely even feel it, much less get amnesia from it. Although that's my only real complaint when it comes to that chapter. My second little complaint would definitely be the really, really weird analogy for when the Splicer's arm got owned. Cucumber? Sledge hammer? Lolwut. But that's just nitpicking, really. Whatever the case, keep up the good work!

Also, Zone-tan is love

This story has great potential. Your a extremely talented First-person perspective writer and I love Bioshock. I hope you update soon.

would you kindly write another chapter?

An interesting little take on the story. I quite like it.