This is beautifully written. I love how you weave the italicized part throughout (even if it doesn't make sense until the very end) and I just love the flow of the whole piece. It's like the jagged thoughts and incoherent sentences fit perfectly in with the story you've told. I really have no concrete idea of what's going on in this piece as a whole but it's so intriguing and definitely draws me in.

Oh. My. God.

This was beautiful. Truly, truly beautiful. Words can't even begin to describe it.

It's like-like-like... a piece of music. The final, the coda, is wonderful - Lazarus, come forth. It is like the final, resounding chord at the end of Chopin's Fantaise-Impromptu.

Do I sound too much like a music freak here?

Oh. Wow.

This is a beautiful, wonderful one-shot. It shows Edward's deepest thoughts.

One question, though - why did Bella have red eyes? Red eyes, as in, she was finally like him, or red eyes as in she had been crying?

The 'Three figures cluster at the top of the stairs' fragment describes Bella's changing, doesn't it?

And...what did that 'As far as anyone knows' mean? I mean, I know it means that Bella has an immortal life...and no-one knows that she's immortal. Is that it?

Anyway, an absolutely stunning story, probabely the very best one-shot I've read - I'm not kidding.

Like I said, this is a beautiful piece of writing.

Quin

That was amazing. You're such a great writer. I'm ashamed of my own words right now, they don't say a little bit about how great this is. Congratulations.

lovely.

Oh man. I stand in awe of sheer greatness. This is so, for lack of eloquence, cool. Just the way it moves... You had me researching things that were lost on me and wow, the connections do great justice. brilliant work...

This is the first time I've ever reviewed something. I loved you're other stories, especially Greed, it's so well written. But I think this story is my favorite, because I don't quite get it. That makes it perfect. Beautiful job.

wow... this is the most unique piece i think i've ever read... i would lavish you with compliments, but I really can't think of anything else to say.
beautiful, amazing, wonderful.

Right up there with L'Engle when it comes to the plays on words and religion as a metaphor. Love it, love it, love it. I am increasingly glad that I found you on ff and always excited when the alert in my box is about you. Bravo!

That was...magnificent. It is, hands down, the best piece of Twilight fanfiction I have read thus far. I am in awe of this piece. It's incredibly, incredibly powerful. Very nicely done.

wow. i'm honestly speechless. if you can come up with something like this as a fanfiction, i'd die to see what would ocme up if you actually wrote a story. amazing job.

Beautiful. The emotions in this were so real. Please write more like this, it took my breath away.

beautiful. nothing else to say.

This is a really beautiful story arc. I love how you tied a central theme from beginning to end.
Jessica