Help
Home Just In Communities Forums Beta Readers Dictionary Search
Reviews for: Featherbrite's Tale - Page 1 of 7
Encrypter
2009-07-03 . chapter 5
A classic.
Have you perhaps considered making a proper sentai series starring the Amazon girls?
Virosa
2009-06-13 . chapter 1
very good story. just one question... ARE YOU ALIVE!
Ganheim
2009-05-03 . chapter 1
1: A Nervous Child (ANC)
"You call my kind yousei here, though my kind are called faerie elsewhere.
[Sounds plausible enough]

"Ranchan no baka,"
[Unnecessary Japanese]

a style of fighting they call 'martial arts'."
[‘Martial Arts’ are ALL styles of fighting (it does alternatively translate to ‘the arts of war’)]

the girls from that other High School had looked their way.
[But they’re in middle school at this point, there’d be no ‘other’ High School]

(Censored to keep this story from getting a Lemon label)
[Or you could try something with a hint of taste and class and sense and just skip over it. Even the implication, like ‘lemons’ themselves, serve to add absolutely nothing to the story]

"From oyaji's reaction
[Unnecessary Japanese]

that got Oyaji
[Unnecessary Japanese]

out of some chikan (groper)
[ Unnecessary Japanese]

Hidden Dragon. Ranma could seemingly negate his own weight, walking across the thinnest rice paper without breaking it or up a cliff or wall as if he had spider-powers.
[ Actually, I’m pretty sure this capability is something that folklore martial artists learned anyway. Movies like ‘Hero’ emphasize the point]

Or sharing with Oyaji,
[Unnecessary Japanese]

There was a danger for those who used chi to attentuate their lifespan, and that was ennui.
[

The purple-haired Amazon licked her lips - this guy wasn't too bad. Maybe another kiss, just in case.
[Okay, that’s funny]

Probably that baka Genma
[Unnecessary Japanese]

her transformed iinazuke.
[Unnecessary Japanese]

Simple objects, as long as they weren't made of metal?
[Problem is: you’d be surprised how many things have metal. We live in a composite society]

[ what the hell? Is this the same story? FOLLOWING:
:Better Father Than Genma Scenario.
:3) Get Him A Few Engagements/Rivals/Opponents Along The Way.
[How would ‘few engagements’ be a better father than Genma?]

"He can take apart a machine gun and put it back together blindfolded, pilot almost any military vehicle (he specializes in mid-air combat),
[Oh, something even _more_ useless to society than hand-to-hand combat!]

The first half of the story was interesting and would’ve made a fair story, but the second half of the chapter looked like you accidentally pasted a different story into it…one that did not by any means fit. It could’ve been good without that.
DarkBlueHated
2009-04-25 . chapter 4
I probably should have checked to see if this fic was still active before getting so hooked to it..
DarkBlueHated
2009-04-25 . chapter 3
Hah! Loved every bit in this chapter. Even the omake! :O
DarkBlueHated
2009-04-25 . chapter 2
Interesting. I do hope Nabiki and Kasumi will grow out of their shell that they've placed themselves in with this new "Super" Ranma. I can't help but feel sorry for Kasumi however. She honestly looked like she wouldn't mind to be the fiance without any ulterior motives.
DarkBlueHated
2009-04-24 . chapter 1
Nice. I especially like the creativity and imagination portrayed here. I'd also like to mention that the way your write seems quite flattering to me. Your style of writing is easy to read and descriptive without being verbose. A definite plus.
Skye Silverwing
2009-03-18 . chapter 6
So the Amazons... AND the dark forces... are COMPLETELY confused as to the importance of that manga... THAT IS FUNNY. I am curious though, did you come up with all that Faerie lore yourself, pull it from another series, or research it somehow? I find this story to be entrancing, so I do hope it continues.
PS you are great with non-lemon Omake.
James Birdsong
2008-01-14 . chapter 6
Weird but good maybe
James Birdsong
2008-01-14 . chapter 5
Egads but good.
James Birdsong
2008-01-14 . chapter 4
Hoorah.
James Birdsong
2008-01-14 . chapter 3
Odd but oh well hehe :)
James Birdsong
2008-01-14 . chapter 2
Okay I laughed a few times. I admit that.
James Birdsong
2008-01-14 . chapter 1
*applaud*
Rose1948
2007-05-24 . chapter 6
*falls on ** laughing my floor off* This is just great! You gonna update this at some point? Or has it died an ignominious death?
Return to Top